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Jun 23, 2010
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Conversation with Dad part 1: Reality Check
(Dad): Music for consideration?! (Son): Clearly, I see your frustration In this “pleasant” conversation So let’s discuss the lot (Dad): You’ve become crazy, where’s my belt?!(Son): Right there Dad! I need a good welt! It’d take more than I’d ever felt To leave my dreams to rot (Dad): You’ll never win, I’ll say again!(Son): I need some paper, grab a pen! I’ve worked hard, to be what I am You know not what I want (Dad): Your dreamed up future can’t come true Everyone knows this! Why don’t you?! Pick safe fallbacks, jobs you can do This! A life you could flaunt (Son): Wrong to dream?! Than call me guilty I’d rather this, than be safely Closed away from living risky Leave the unharmed to ache (Dad): Whoever signs you, has no taste! No talent boy! Enormous waste! Accepting you?! Utter disgrace! Listen for your own sake! (Son): I’ve always listened! All I hear, Ramblings of anger, mixed with fear, Telling me, that I must adhere To their ideas of me To these ideas, I shan’t conform Dad, I’m me! In way, shape and form Hoping to whether life’s dull storm-- Simple reality
— Lil Z, Jun 23, 2010
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Sara
16 years 1 month ago
Oh wow!
Lil Z
16 years 1 month ago
Thank you so much Sara!
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Lil Z
Lil Z
16 years 1 month ago
Hello!
greeneyes
16 years 1 month ago
Yes! Welcome! This was
Lil Z
16 years 1 month ago
Thank you Elizabeth!
xena465
16 years 1 month ago
Very Clever Lil
Lil Z
16 years 1 month ago
Hey thanks!
Lil Z
16 years 1 month ago
Thank you so much!
jetz
16 years 1 month ago
Hi Z, May I, too, welcome
Lil Z
16 years 1 month ago
Thank you very much Sue!
Moloko D. Mahuma
16 years ago
Dear Liz
Lil Z
16 years ago
Wow!
mona
16 years ago
OH Lil Z
Lil Z
16 years ago
Haha thank you very much Mona!
Professor Purple
16 years ago
Wow, wow, WOW!
Lil Z
16 years ago
Thank you Antoine!
magics02
16 years ago
Really nice here
Lil Z
16 years ago
I'm honored!
raj
16 years ago
A very well dramatized act
Lil Z
16 years ago
Thank you Raj
weirdelf
16 years ago
bloody well written and well stated
Lil Z
16 years ago
Thank you Jess!
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