♥ love ♥

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This is a very strong emotional write...I love it. May I suggest a slight change in format... love is a beautiful thing, it makes the flowers bloom in spring, it makes the blue birds sing, love is a beautiful thing. love is a horrible thing, it’s the death of people you once knew, it’s a heart split in two, it’s something that lasts forever, love is a horrible thing. love is something you cannot describe, love is a feeling only you can feel for something or someone in a way no other can, love can make you sin, love is beautiful, love is horrible. Just want to help. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Overall great poem! I always like contradictions, which are a huge part of the concept here. Hope you don't mind my pointing out two little things: the correct spelling is "bloom", and after "sin,", a space is missing. I know I'm a nitpicker... Also, as far as rhythm is concerned, I would replace "in the spring" by "in spring". Antoine

i think you did a great job and pulled it together nicely but it seemed like you struggled a bit to make it ryme there in the end "love can make you sin" it doesnt seem quite as deep as the rest of the poem you might work on that a little but overall good work :))) Desu Haley

wonderful thought of love! shirley harrison