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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Jun 22, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

GENERIC LOVE


"Placating.
 Suffocating.
  Driven -
by Psyche's whimsical lack.

Expendable.
Untenable.
 An attempt to engorge the void.
Stop up the unmendable cracks.

A repetitive compulsion
to deny the norm.
New lovers, strange faces
storm after storm.

Yet always believing this time
it wıll be the real thing...
Love -
 in its'  True Form.*

BjR   22 June, 2010

*true form is a term used in Horse racing, which means the horse looks at its' peak form before the race., i.e. before you place your bets!


— Bonitaj, Jun 22, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Atticus

15 years 11 months ago

The rhythm to this is great!

The rhythm to this is great! Feels like aggression, hurt, and compassion on a chain. Not a thing about it that I don't love. Best, Nathaniel
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

I like it Boni ,.. there is

I like it Boni ,.. there is a tentative-ness to it ... and child like awe of discovery lovely write enjoy the sun bella love JayCee x x x (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

gracie mille

thanks for your tenacious commitment to work- into all hours of the night Jay-Cee! Appreciate your comments! Ciao |Boni
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you

So much for your gracious compliment. Please come back with my stars ;) kind regards Bonita j
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

forever searching

always belief, always hope, always thinking this one's THE one the eternal optomist which by the way i reckon is a more appropriate title.... just me and my suggestion xx fantastic write boni - rhythm and rhyme spot on as far as my ear tells me... nominated and book-marked love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks Judy

Know where you're coming from in that deduction - the truth is about questioning the 'sameness' of GENERIC LOVE with the never diminishing hope of finding a more exclusive, ultimate REAL (albeit 'fantasy') love! ;) Ciao Boni
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

yeah did get that too boni

also the old story - 'i'm unlucky in love, my lovers all turn out to be alcoholics/gamblers/addicts/violent/ take your pick...' when all along one refuses to acknowledge they are drawn for some ungodly reason to that type of personality. lol judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Generic Love

Within your poem it seems to me you are describing the gropings Of the immature and inexperienced. I like it very much! Always, Cat
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

hello Cat

How I smıled at your ınnocent take on thıs one! Truth ıs, there ıs nothıng ımmature or ınexperıenced about 'repetıtıve compulsıon'. More than lıkely, you take ıt to the grave!! Thanks for stoppıng by! Cheers Bonı
Grieta Lindeque

Grieta Lindeque

15 years 11 months ago

This is skillfully done.

This is skillfully done. This topic can so easily turn bitter or neurotic. You managed to capture a childlike quality in these words...but still held the helplessness right there in front of me... Superbly done.
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Ananzi

15 years 11 months ago

Nice one

I read this the other day and I really liked it. So close to the way I sometimes write. If only all the movies were real, the world would be as you described. But alas, we live in the real world where love and trust is earned and grown rather than magically acquired overnight. I really like this.
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Hello Grıeta & Ananzı

Just stopped by to thank you both for your kınd comments and support! So glad ıt made sense to you both - exactly as I would've lıked ıt ınterpreted! CHeers Bonıta j