Mornings Rejuvenation

This is a beautiful soul stirring piece! I loved every intoxicating word of it. Simply brilliant! Always, Cat

Brilliant write. Some really great images and very well written. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Some stars for your sunshiney poem the only suggestions are these, maybe a bit more concentration on the punctuation, line caps and pauses... example, The rising hands of dawn spread wide and upwards, climb. (seems to need a pause there) Darkness ebbs to shades of gray and Slivers of brilliant color, seep into the day I love that image as it is one that I love to see but I think the "and" and the "the" could be omitted. merely suggestions my friend, an enjoyable piece, a truly wonderful ending... an ahhhh moment. Richard

Just lovely, I loved all the images, really beautiful. Love Mand xxx

Great Poem! I really enjoyed it.

Nice. Really lovely poem awash with imagery. I would tighten it up a bit with Richard's suggestions. ~A "People sometimes inquire what form of government is most suitable for an artist to live under. To this question there is only one answer. The form of government that is most suitable to the artist is no government at all." Oscar Wilde

there is no critiquing this just have to tell you to take a bow love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

really bad form to have a spelling mistake in the title Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,

big difference, and I might not have written it but I did enjoy it. A couple of things I could suggest. Inch by inch she ascends inch by inch implies a stop/start movement to me and ascends terminates the line rather abruptly, perhaps something like gradually she is ascending Seized from Sol’s own rich supply who could resist some more alliteration here and a slightly less technical sounding word that supply? Seized from Sol’s own source so those lines would read- gradually she is ascending Scattering shafts of golden light, Seized from Sol’s own source Slivers of colored brilliance, seep into the day [don't need the comma] A warm light breeze follows in her wake Shyly caressing all objects in its way mmm, "in its way" sounds like obstructions, where I see the breeze moving round caressinlgy. maybe it's the word objects that gives me pause. Maybe- Shyly caressing the land on its way Just suggestions, see what you think Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,