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WrittenInBlood
Jun 22, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Amity

I want a hand to hold in the dark,
I have only mine; I'm forlorn.
And my disposition is now stark,
I feel as if my persona is deformed.

I want a face to see in my heart,
But there's no one to conjure.
To me they're all mean and tart.
My heart is now so sore.

When I was in the depths of despair,
And that nothing would get better,
My phone rings and I see you there.
You set me free from my fetters.

We seemed to talk forever,
You gave me back my content serenity.
All around me flew the zephyr.
It was just you and me and our amity. :) 
— WrittenInBlood, Jun 22, 2010

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xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Sarah

A lovely poem on being re-united with a loved one...Very nice. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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WrittenInBlood

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks I wrote it about my

Thanks I wrote it about my friend that moved to Massachusetts, and I just got his number.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Hello

Yes, I agree with Xena, it is a very nice poem. Full of feelings well expressed. My favorite lines are: I want a hand to hold in the dark, I have only mine; I’m forlorn. And my disposition is now stark, I feel as if my persona is deformed. Just one small thing, in the line: "And that nothing would get better," I think you could leave the word "that" out as it adds nothing to the line. Always, Cat
ANC1996

ANC1996

15 years 11 months ago

Hi Sarah(:

Holy crapp you know some big words,ahhh i dont;; (: Hehe but i really like'd your poem !! Peace, Love, & Spacemen, Adri