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Haunt Me

Haunt me all you want,
I am yours to keep,
My heart misses you so strongly,
It nearly skips a beat,
The void you left,
Can never be filled,
This wound that absorbs me,
Shall never be healed,

Your voice, your smile, your laughter,
Your advice and humor,
Are only found in memories now,
Of a being overcome with stupor,

I think of you upon waking,
And in moments before I sleep,
All through day and night,
And everything in between,

Do you linger here?
Looking over my shoulder each day,
Well then stay as long as you like,
You will not hear me complain,

For if I could but feel your presence again,
Envelope me, my dear,
I would make no qualms about it,
For I still want you very near,

So haunt me all you want,
But know I set you free,
I only desire happiness for you,
Even if it be away from me,
Yet, till we meet again,
On the shore at heaven's gate,
You more than have my permission,
To stay with me while you wait,

For I'll love you forever,
No matter if you choose to leave,
But if you are not ready to go,
Feel free,
My dearest,
To haunt me.
— shane, Jun 21, 2010

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Tonya

Tonya

15 years 11 months ago

Really an interesting poem.

If it has come about through loss, my deepest sympathy. Either way, I love the concept and see much promise with it. I do feel some of the lines can be condensed (there are filler words that could be taken out, while retaining the meaning and impact)and would allow the work to flow much better. I enjoyed the poem, but do think you need a little more polish on it. Sincerely, Tonya
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shane

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you both

Thank you both. I tried to make some revisions as Tonya suggested and remove some of those filler words but I never could get the edits to stick. Don't really know why. Thank you both for your comments. I greatly appreciate it.
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

SOooooooo Great Shane

I love it very much. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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shane

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you Xena

Thank you Xena. I am so glad you like it. I just wrote it the other night. I usually take time to go back over and polish them up a bit, but I didn't this one. I was anxious to post, I guess. Since joining Neopoet you have given me great encouragment and advice. Thank you so much.
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Any time Shane

I know how much your writing means to you and if I can help in any way, just let me know. I mean that sincerely. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell