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Jun 20, 2010
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Sharing a Breath of Life
I smell the fruit
of the persimmon tree
and a haunting begins
as shivers run free
of the road ahead
and one laying behind
I sweep them all up
and out of my mind
as a shadow appears
and is far past the veil
his robes swung out
like wind in a sail
in his eyes is an evil
that glitters the dark
the cut of his mouth
like the score of a mark
his hair of serpents
reach out in glee
and it was then I held
my soul close to me
his reason for coming
was that I had sold,
my soul for a life
that no air does hold
but I found out, that
sometimes god forgives,
in my sacrifice was found
the very reason I live
someone had perished
so I could breathe air,
but what I would give now
if we could have just shared
— Seren, Jun 20, 2010
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Candlewitch
16 years 1 month ago
Dearest Jayne
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Cat
xena465
16 years 1 month ago
A life for a life
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
I love that you got the
CyberSpace
16 years 1 month ago
A gentle rhythm to this one
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
a gentle funeral march eh ?
raj
16 years 1 month ago
Hi JayCee
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Hes gone from this plain Raj
shirley harrison
16 years 1 month ago
JC
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Shirley
lou
16 years 1 month ago
JayCee
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Lou
DawningDaytripper
16 years 1 month ago
You don’t make it easy
Seren
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Dear Julie
yenti
16 years 1 month ago
No Sale Today
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Big Smile
Geezer
16 years 1 month ago
What if?...
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Dearest Gee
Geezer
16 years 1 month ago
'S OK...
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