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THE SCIENCE OF CLOUDS

I remember way back when
my oldest son was nine or ten
'twas one of those warm lazy days
went to the dock to catch some rays

We laid on our backs with out speaking
(back before my bones were creaking)
as fluffy white clouds drifted by
he turned his head to catch my eye

"What makes clouds?"he asked me so
I explained as best I know
thus without further conjecture
I'll recall my science lecture

Clouds start out as water vapor
(as I quoted from a high school paper)
thats drawn from surface of the ocean
the heat incurring upward motion

As vapor rises air grows cool
(I blabbered on like an old fool)
water droplets then condence
you know that this makes perfect sense

Drops by cohesion then combine
(my exposition going fine)
the sunlight turns this damp mass white
allowing cloud to come to sight

I laid there feeling real smart then
thinking tale was over when
his next question left me agog
"why does that cloud look like a dog?"

— scribbler, Jun 20, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

Critiques

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

WoW Stan

This is fabulous. You have the gift of poetry in rhyme and everything else that makes a poet a poet. You gave me a much needed smile today. Thank you `Stan The Man`. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

clouds

hey xena! thanks for the time to drop in and leave such a nice comment.....scribbler

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Clever

clever and informative to lou xx

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

clouds

appreciate read and comment.....scribbler

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

I am floating on a cloud!

A science lesson and a poem wow! i live with a physicist and i know all about the clouds stan, this one is truly wonderful, i also see all of the pictures they make, and just last night there were 2 eyes in the sky made up of clouds "excellent write" much love, p.s my boyfriend loved this too! shirley harrison

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

clouds

just 1 boyfriend?lol.thanks for read and comment.......Stan

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Science of the boyfriend!

one is enough! infact one is sometimes too much! L:O:L shirley harrison

loved

15 years 11 months ago

I HAVE OBSERVED

..U REALLY WRITE BEAUTIFUL VERSE AND EVEN BETTER COMMENTS I MISSED UR BLESSINGS this capital type error is for my eyes weak as they are people despise i am not shouting as i am deaf too hope u will pardon me wi;; uuuuuuuu? Thank you all for your lovely moral support I live on your shoulders as you read over mine and I love to thank each one individually hope you don’t mind I am unable to render such attention I wonder is time a limitation I shall try to solve my miscalculation till then abide with me I am a loner come ride with me

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

clouds

thank you for time to read and write such kind comment

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Scribbler

Really cool when you can combine a poem with instruction. Love your rhyming, too. Always, Cat

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

ciouds

As poem says,nobody has all the answers(maybe a chaos theorist?) thanks for read and time to comment........scribbler

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

Just a big fat Bravo from me this early morning ... 4am and the witches wind is howling the roof off I can barely think lol love and hugs JayCee congrates on the spotlight hun big smile (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

spotlight!?

Appreciate your letting me know !Never can tell how something is going to go over.thanks for read and continued support,now go back to sleep lol.......scribbler

raj

15 years 11 months ago

Hi Stan...

i loved the humor and the rhyme..and wondered how did you explain his second question :) may be we can expect to hear your response to "why does that cloud look like a dog"... wishing you smiles and Happy Father's Day...raj (sublime_ocean)...

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

lol

I guess I'll answer second question after getting doctorates in meteorology and chaos theory with minor in human perceptions ha!ha!thanks for read and comment....scribbler

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

why do clouds look like dogs?

people see what they want to in the shapes of clouds as it is your mind that recognise the shapes! and i have that information from an expert! so Stan Please forgive me as i did not say "Happy fathers day to you" ! much love and i hope you do not mind that i replied to the question! shirley harrison

loved

15 years 11 months ago

ONCE IN MONTREAL

Montreal's Clouds Where clouds are unique u will not believe me i saw what looked like an erect penis and the intercourse were as if about to commence i hadn't a camera nor my cell for that snap is as clear today as twas then i would've qualified as a photo person if i hadn't lost the mind then yes i did recall FREUD AFTER ALL. I WASN'T DREAMING THEN NOR WAS I IN A DOGS PEN CLOUDS CAN BE MISLEADING LIKE THREE OLD MEN

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

clouds

replying to question seems a popular thing lol!thanks for read and belated father's day wish........scribbler

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

clouds

thanks for coming by and leaving such a nice comment......scribbler

loved

15 years 11 months ago

I AM

A SCIENTIST include mathematics ur idea of teaching science in poetry is unique u can kill TWO BIRDS with one stone. gr88888 should u like to reply this message please message me as i don't get any comments in /as emails so i wont know thanks Montreal's Clouds Where clouds are unique u will not believe me i saw what looked like an erect penis and the intercourse were as if about to commence i hadn't a camera nor my cell for that snap is as clear today as twas then i would've qualified as a photo person if i hadn't lost the mind then yes i did recall FREUD AFTER ALL. I WASN'T DREAMING THEN NOR WAS I IN A DOGS PEN CLOUDS CAN BE MISLEADING LIKE THREE OLD MEN

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

clouds

thanks loved.Only message intended was that we're none of us as smart as we think.As to "penis cloud"since poem's submission I've been schooled as to mind perceiving what it wants to see Hmmmmm..........scribbler

Beauregard

15 years 11 months ago

Right up my alley

a touch of science scrounged up in the hopes of better understanding the wonders of nature/beauty/"human condition." 2.1: "with out" --> 'without' 3.4: "I'll" --> 'I recalled' (switches tenses from the rest of the poem which is past tense) 4.3: "thats" --> ' that's ' 4.3: "from surface ocean" --> I think there is a set meter to this poem so suggesting an adjustment to something like "from the surface of the ocean" would be tearing the meter all to hell. A little bit of that line's flow/scansion is lost for the meter's sake. The message isn't lost and the communication isn't jeopardized, but I thought I'd mention it anyway. The short answer to his second question is: Imagination :) The long answer: Most likely has something to do with visual association and the visual cortex of the brain which takes previously learned images and distinguishes them in the random matter of the clouds. "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Allan Poe

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

clouds

appreciate corrections and suggestions.Hard to believe,but I actually DO preview before submitting lol! good luck in election.........scribbler

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

'cos it's gonna piss on you !!!!

is the answer scribbler another great scribble mate love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

clouds

Damn! why didn't I think of that?lol.thanks for read and answer....scribbler