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Revolving Door

We used to call you `Bean-Pole`

because you were so slim.

I don’t know if you remember this

slender, was every limb.

 

I used to cook dinner for all of us

the potatoes, I’d forget the salt.

Sometimes I’d add too much

I was very young, not my fault.

 

You were very shy with girls

sometimes people would tease.

Remember, you were just a boy

it was hard to feel at ease.

 

You came home one night

from the first time at a work’s party.

You fell in the door drunk

You were faking, being a smarty.

 

When mum died, it was tough

there was a special bond with each other.

You ended up alone, more than us

I love you John, my beautiful brother.

 

Maggie and I came to your bed-sit- room

every Thursday night for a visit.

The sandwiches, biscuits and sweets

that you gave us was exquisite.

 

Now you lie in hospital, at death’s door

fighting for your life with cancer.

I pray to mum, and our sister in Heaven

“Don’t take him, my prayer; please answer”.

 

 

I haven’t been on line for a few days because my brother is really ill and this poem is a prayer to God, even though I’m not religious, but open minded, asking him not to take my brother away from us.

— xena465, Jun 19, 2010

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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

door

all we can do is hope for the best.Beautiful write and best wishes....scribbler
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you so much Scribbler

It is times like this that you realise who’s genuine in your family and who your real friends are. And I’ve learned a lot that disturbs me. John, my brother, is fine; for the moment and thank you for your lovely comment. His Kidney’s are not functioning at all and his bone marrow is diseased, but they’re giving him treatment that may stabilise some of this, but he has to go onto dialysis to keep them working. I’ll know more tomorrow. I have to stay positive. Thanks a lot Stan, you’re a true friend. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Door

Dearest Xena, very sad but very beautifully written it left me with goose bumps at the end and i love the Title Best wishes from me too Xena and much love shirley harrison
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

My dear friend Shirley

Thank you so very much. I have to be strong for my brother. He’s laughing and joking around, like he always does, but I know he’s scared; and so am I. But, he’ll be fine; I have to hold on to that. And until I know otherwise, I’m still Xena, The Warrior Princess. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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night_writer71

15 years 11 months ago

[some times the a great

[some times the a great begaining is shadowed by seemly the end]that was told to me. i 'll pass it on to you. xena i will hold prays and hope for you and your family. that is a very heart touching writing.
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Shucks Night_Writer

You don’t even know me and yet you leave me such a lovely comment. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Rosina

As I started to read, I thought "This poem is charming!" When I got to the end I realized that your brother is fighting for his life. I join you in your prayers, adding mine to yours. Always, Cat
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Cat

Thank you so very much. I'm normally on line a good few hours every day, but I only found out on Tuesday that my brother has had cancer for two years, but it was classed as smouldering cancer; which meant he has been living a healthy life for two years until it flared up on Monday. My oldest brother Dave kept it from me, at the request of John because of my depression, in which I believe, was the right thing to do; as he was in no immediate danger until now. I’ll know more about it tomorrow after Dave talks to the specialist in the afternoon. Thanks a lot Cat xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Cheers Loved

Thank you so much. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

A thousand prayers of

A thousand prayers of wellness and a candle lit for him Xena my thoughts are with you and your family at this time I am so sorry ot hear this sad news :((((hugs)))) love and big hugs JayCee x x x x (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

You've suffered a lot yourself JayCee

Fortunately for me, I think? I’ve not had to deal with cancer in my close family’s history, but unfortunately I know very little about the pressure of coping with this kind of illness. My mum, my dad and my sister died suddenly, so I’ve not had to cope with a life-threatening illness, apart from my animals. With my mum, she had MS, but it was pneumonia that killed her, not the MS. And she died overnight. So this is something very new and very scary. Thanks so much JayCee xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

i reread it

its heart rending and yet touchy hands of God just pick and chose albeit unknowingly sibling's love is 4 ever i know it
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

This is very kind of you

I'm going to see John today. I'll find out a lot more about what's going on, as he's been on a new treatment these past few days and seems to be responding quite well. Thank you Loved. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

please do

..... go and share and tell John that he has a friend in me let him read OR U PLEASE READ my poetry and a smile on his face thou shall see then tell me if Shakes' incarnate i could PERHAPS be...
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

My brother

I sure will Loved. Thank you. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

15 years 11 months ago

I will send you all the

I will send you all the postive thoughts I have Rosina for you and your brother. This is a perfect prayer, open ended or whatever. It remembers all the good and silly, that will help eveyone. I don't chose to offer any suggestions on something so personal, nor did I find any to suggest. Just so you know. Julie D.D.
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Julie

Thank you very much. I can only hope that with all the technology and drugs of today that he will be able to recover to live a reasonable quality of life. He’s not the kind of guy to complain, so it’s hard to know how he’s really feeling. He’s a bit of a joker, so you can’t be serious with him, you always end up laughing, which is a good thing in a way, I believe; it helps me to keep myself together. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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Moloko D. Mahuma

15 years 11 months ago

Be strong

Your brother is in my prayers. "Your will to live can sustain you when you are sick but if you loose it your last hope is gone;" may your brother's will to live sustain him. All I can say is God is more nearer to you more than you can ever think of - try Him, He will never live you nor forsake you. We are still living in the age of miracles - anythingthing great can happen. Love, Moloko
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you Moloko

I know you're right. Although I’m not religious I do believe in a higher force than just us, and if it is God, then I’m sure he’ll know that when I pray for my brother, I’m actually praying to him in the hope that he will hear me. You’re a great girl, thank you so much. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 11 months ago

A brilliant poem

You have a brilliant ability to capture my emotions in your poems. Bravo love!
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lil Z

Thank you so very much for lovely comment. I really appreciate it. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

15 years 11 months ago

Oh so sorry oh so sad Rosina

Ann of Norway If I prayed I would for your brother I will wish him well as hard as I can and hope some comes his way, that's so tough isn't it? I am so saddened y this news because you have already lost others of your family and were closely involved with them, this is terrible and I hope you feel slightly strengthened by our wishes to you dear Rosina? My love to you as always Ann. XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX "that you gave us was exquisite.".............WERE exquisite P.S. I have just watched Ravenshakti's video about the Indian dancer who went through a terrible breast cancer operation loosing all her hair etc and has danced herself out of it it was quite moving and she danced beautifully, also making a painting at the same time with her feet, she found that concentrating on something she could do she fought it well.
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Faith is a great healer Ann

To go through so much and dance away the pain takes a very strong person. I must take a look at that video. I visited my brother tonight and he's fine. He'll never be himself again, there's no cure for him. But he can live with the aid of dialysis and drugs. He can’t have a transplant or anything, his cancer is too far gone, but we’ve been reassured that he can still live for many years to come with proper care. But it’s also up to him to be positive, like the dancing girl. Thank you so very much Ann. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

What a beautful poem

Xena, I want you to know that even though I have just met you on here, my heart goes out to you. I will say some payers for your brother. Your inner beauy shines throughout your wonderful poem. It is very genuine and I was deeply moved by it. God bless...Faithmairee
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Faith

Thank you so very much for your kind words and prayers for my brother. You sound to me like a beautiful soulful person. I’d just like to say to you, welcome again to Neo Faith xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
greeneyes

greeneyes

15 years 11 months ago

beautiful

This brought tears to my eyes. You are in my prayers, great poem! Elizabeth
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you Elizabeth

My brother is doing a lot better. It's just so hard when you've known someone to be so healthy all his life and then boom!!! He's struck down with so many organ failures at once that are life-threatening and can’t be cured, only contained. PS. I really love your flower poem. I’m going back to read it again later. I hope it’s still in the Spotlight where it should be. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
hobo

hobo

15 years 11 months ago

beautiful dedi

This is a beautiful dedication to someone who means so much to you. beautiful write and read You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Howdy cowboy

Nice to see you again Hobo. I love your new poem, true to form, you naughty wee thing. Thank you for your lovely comment on my brother. He’ll be fine, I have to believe that. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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magics02

15 years 11 months ago

Xena my lady friend

Beautiful write here and my thoughts and prayers are with you at this time honey. Stay strong for your brother and know I care. I know how close I am to my three brothers and how it hurts to see anything happen to them also. Much love honey miss talking to you. Mona xoxox
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Mona

Thank you so much for your prayers for my brother. You're a good caring girl and I love you for that. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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Wilton Joseph

15 years 11 months ago

The revolving door

Lets forget about the beauty of the poem love. Let's dwell on its source. Coming from the heart it means u must have had a close relationship with ur brother and ur are having a tough time. I don't want to be intrusive for I consider these moments to be extremely private. So I will just say this, "stay up" sister in poems.
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Wow thank you Wilton

I haven't seen you around for a wee while, so I must check to see if you have a new post. You're so very wise and kind. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

so sorry rosina

i was wondering where you were my prayers are with you and your brother beautiful tribute here love judy xxxx ps 'The sandwiches, biscuits and sweets that you gave us was exquisite' ('was' should be 'were' i think) http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks Judy

I was at a total loss when I heard the news of my brother. I kind of lost myself in myself, again; trying to hide from the facts of life. Sometimes I just need to shut myself off for a few days, but then I regenerate and come back fighting...after all I’m Xena, a Warrior, fearless; ha, well most of the time. Thanks so much Judy. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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ziggy

15 years 11 months ago

hi

hi, tears my friend my thoughts are with you xx zigs
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you dear Zigs

That's very kind of you. He's responding well to his treatment. It's not a cure but a way of keeping him with us for as long as possible. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you Shan

I was a little hurt that you don't remember me. I've left you a few comments on your recent poem and an older one. Thank you for your support for my brother. xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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Mari Shine

15 years 11 months ago

REVOLVING DOOR.

XENA, THIS FINELY CRAFTED POEM IS SO LOVINGLY PENNED AND FLOWS EFFORTLESSLY FROM YOUR WARM HEART THROUGH YOUR GOLDEN POETIC PEN. WHAT A WONDERFUL PICTURE YOU PAINT OF LIFE GROWING UP AND OF LOVING AND CARING FOR YOUR SIBLINGS, BLESS YOU ALL. HOW POIGNANT THE STORY IS THAT YOUR DEAR BROTHER IS UNWELL. I SHALL KEEP HIM IN MY PRAYERS! KEEP STRONG XENA, FOR BOTH YOURSELF AND YOUR DEAR BROTHER. IT IS A PRIVILEGE TO READ THIS POEM. THANK YOU FOR SHARING.
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

You're so sweet

Thank you Mari I'll pass your prayers on to my brother. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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raj

15 years 11 months ago

I dont know what to say

I dont know what to say after reading this one...so all i will do is send a warm hug your way with lots of best wishes and prayers for your beloved brother ... believe in miracles and the research which is going on... raj (sublime_ocean)..
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

You're so sweet Raj

Thank you I will pass them on. He is responding to treatment, but; it's not a cure. He's still not a very well man and never will be again...Living on borrowed time, but I guess, in a way; we all are. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell