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The World Behind my Wall

Its like looking in on a secret
one i havnt heard yet
I dont know what ill do
what i'll say yet.
I get told bits, peices,
Just some to know clues
on what i might do.

I've seen movies,
but i havnt seen the future.
Im ready to go
get rid of this.
I have to know it all
Im ready to know
just what i'll say.

im just one of the few
that're left in this room.
Ready to escape soon
to feel the rain and wonder.
Im no longer a kid.
It's time to run in the rain,
shine with the lightning,
& be heard like the thunder.

— ANC1996, Jun 19, 2010

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Region, Country: Florida, ZZC

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Shakespeare, Homer.

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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

the world

nice fresh write.don't be in too big of a hurry to get into "real" world.......scribbler
ANC1996

ANC1996

15 years 11 months ago

Thankyah (:

I actually did what the poem was actually about today;; Haha, Nothing big. Peacce love and spacemen, Adri
Esker

Esker

15 years 11 months ago

solid poem

three paragraphs opening middle closing I like the hope the strength in the last lines its a very focused peice
ANC1996

ANC1996

15 years 11 months ago

Thankss(:

The last lines are my favorite part, haha. Peace Love adn Spacemen, Adri !
weirdelf

weirdelf

15 years 11 months ago

Love the poem, Adri, but it's a bit of a fixer-upper

there's lots of "i"s to capitalise and apostrophes missing ill I'll etc. I get told bits, p[ie]ces, [maybe- bits and pieces] Just some to know clues [maybe- get clues] the second verse just needs those little fixes & be heard like the thunder [and, not &] Like esker said, hope, strength and focus, a grrl poem, love it! I really reckon it's worth doing a bit of an edit. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,