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THE SCOUT

                                                                                for James

You were four years old when I was born
   you were always there to warn
   and watch out for a younger me
   now I'm older and I see

Came to school, you went before
   I wasn't first to cross the door
   your presence managed to prepare
   all involved, I'd soon be there

You were old enough to hunt 'fore me
   but I would tag along to see
   how to spot both game and sign
   for when the time to hunt was mine

By time we both had gotten older
   and each of us had grown much bolder
   we'd often wander off alone
   hoping our skills to further hone

After you went into uniform
   when fall days became unwarm
   you'd come home on leave often to hunt
   now led to stand by larger runt

When your army days had passed
   and neither's legs were quite so fast
   in scouting we would oft' take turn
   since both had little time to burn

Remember that big ten point buck?
   your taking him was not just luck
   I'd leased the land and built the stand
   that brought said monarch to your hand

But that big swamp we used to fish
   and catch as many as we'd wish
   you were first to hike in there
   willing with me this spot to share

It took some work, but we had fun
    for years in woods from sun to sun
    I still recall our last short trip
   as cancer held you in its grip

Too soon the end of our shared time
   tears flow as I write this rhyme
   its back the way it used to be
   again you scout ahead of me
— scribbler, Jun 18, 2010

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

Really a lovely lovely write huni ... brava ... love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Btw I forgot to add it make

Btw I forgot to add it make me think that the sibling went on ahead past the veils ... lovely tribute Love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

scout

thank you and yes 4 yrs.ago
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

"very touching"

dear Stan, beautifully written poetry, very strong and very sad,i am one of 7 children i lost my brother some years ago,we were only one year apart in age! beautifully done stan! much love shirley harrison
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

scout

we all expect to out live parents I think,but hits harder when sibling.thanks for kind comment........scribbler
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

oh stan !!

i knew it was coming, but still those last two lines tore at my heart beautiful scribble scribbler love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
S

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

scout

as they did mine.Sorry of your recent loss, hope I added no salt to wound......scribbler
S

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

43

can barely remember 43 lol! thanks for dropping by with comment.....scribbler
B

barbsdad2003

15 years 11 months ago

Your last ...

line resonates with a terrible reality: I lost my son to cystic fibrosis. He was 20. It's not something I can imagine ever getting over. Thanx, Chuck
S

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

scout

losing brother bad enough,can hardly imagine losing a son.condolences.....Stan
Esker

Esker

15 years 11 months ago

togetherness

my brother and I are not so close I have a few buddies that I know now and I see people with bonds that are so close There is nothing like hunting together (I did this for one season with some "brothers" ) and fishing too so sorry for your loss Your poetry shines in this tribute and brotherly love Thank you Stan Esker~
Professor Purple

Professor Purple

15 years 11 months ago

A very touching poem and

A very touching poem and tribute. I like how the end brings you back to the beginning, like the cycle of life. Just one thing I'm not sure about in the third stanza: maybe it should say "both spot game and sign" but then again, I never hunted. Thanks for sharing this with us! Antoine
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

scout

thanks for comment.In hunting usually sign is spotted before game.Also,switch would mess up rhyme scheme.But thanks for suggestion.......scribbler
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 11 months ago

Your poem is very touching!

My heart goes out to you on the loss of your son, I lost my best friend a few years ago and it tore me into another person. I can't imagine the pain of losing a son, and your ability to write a poem about it is very courageous! You are an amazing person, as well as an incredible poet sir!
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

scout

must not be too good if poem wasn't clear it was brother HA!HA!Took a while before I could talk about it much less write about it.Thanks for taking time to read and comment......scribbler