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Intuition

Yes, I read all the words you wrote

I know exactly what you said

It’s the words between the lines

That hurt and has me seeing red

 

You told me that you loved me

Yet you need a little break

You need some time to think

There are changes you want to make

 

You told me you were faithful

She was just a casual friend

She was easy for you to talk to;

There was nothing there to end

 

Yet, you work till late at night

You’re too busy there to call

And if I do not trust you

I never loved you, for real, at all

 

I’m not exactly sure what happened…

When did we forget to talk?

Remember the lively conversations

On our daily evening walk?

 

Remember all those picnics

When you would sing to me;

We’d make love for hours

Beneath the weeping willow tree

 

I recall the times you’d hold me

We would sit and watch the rain

You decided that was a waste of time

And I was filled with pain

 

We let our lives get busy

There was no time left to share

I feel I’ve now been set aside

And you no longer care.

 

6.18.2010

© Tonya

 

— Tonya, Jun 18, 2010

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Tonya

Tonya

15 years 11 months ago

so right you are, Indi!

Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment. Time is valuable! It is much appreciated. I hope to do more reading and commenting myself soon. My oldest is home on leave from Iraq and will have to leave in a few days. It just feels good to be writing again after such a long spell. :) Always, Tonya
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

intuition

Very descriptive work on lovers drifting apart.In line 14 "to"should be"too" also last line in verse 6 misses rhyme.Perhaps something like"by spring beneath the tree"?.enjoyed read.........scribbler
Tonya

Tonya

15 years 11 months ago

:) Thank you Mr. Scribbler

lol, i never catch all those mistakes! I will correct them and fix that missed rhyme. I am glad you enjoyed the piece. Rhyme is usually something difficult for me to get away from. lol. although, occassionally a free form falls from my brain! Thank you so much for reading and your time. It is much appreciated. Always, Tonya
Esker

Esker

15 years 11 months ago

when love throws weary kisses

and the eyes stray been away from the lovelies for half a month my addiction lying etc let it all slide resentment scaled the wall of contentment and resentment reigned now Im here missing what I built the house of love has fallen and is filled with hued lament all the memory of tidings close intimate intent we live at the edge sometimes these poets feeling the drafts the hot slice of sun spilling in its lust the supple moon breath flowing in the mist I always like your lyrical take and deep song in your poems Tonya this one is fitting to my condition Esker~
Tonya

Tonya

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Esker

I love getting your comments! They are poetry themselves. I am sorry if the poem has dedged up unpleasant thoughts. Temptation is very hard to avoid at times and can begin with the most innocent of conversation. Thanks again, my friend. Always, Tonya
Esker

Esker

15 years 11 months ago

your poetry considers me to think

Ah dont be sorry Tonya your poetry is apt reading and a great poem temptation Lust and Envy my two greatest weaknesses human fraility and the strength we put into it all the engineering of psychology and that enigma the human heart Love this poem and the way its written Esker~