Seren

Jun 18, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

the falling of Karma's hand

it was in the first ray
of morn it birthed
as your ego bruised
the afterbirth of disdain
smeared your face

then as light filament
moved the hands
on a sundial,
your mask slipped
unveiling the next
of contempt

then I knew
this was going to be
the longest day

I smiled and laughed as you
tore minute pieces of my skin
off my torso into streamers,
displaying your humour
to a world wide audience

but then when i thought
your depravity had found its
limits, it found the next

I am bruised as your ego
I hurt and bleed like you

I lent and found
you get back three fold
what you give out

I feel sorry for you
Karma's hand is falling.
you hate me now
and all I feel is pity

— Seren, Jun 18, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Beauregard

15 years 11 months ago

You bleed

and I stand beside you, bandages in hand. There is nothing to critique. Kelsey "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Allan Poe

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

You know I think that this?

You know I think that this? coming from you is the greatest compliment your a tough taskmaster but your fair and your ideas are always on the money thanks for the read and the comment hun made smiley tears love and hugs JayCee x x x (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

CyberSpace

15 years 11 months ago

another great poem sleeping

another great poem sleeping beauty lol and yes I made sure 'not' to hit the nomination button just so the Nazi's know love Snake xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox

Beauregard

15 years 11 months ago

hey Mister Snake

Your wifey works with those Nazis! LOL Kelsey "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Allan Poe

CyberSpace

15 years 11 months ago

Hey Kelsey lool

the Nazi's I am refering to are not the people she works with, the ones im refering to are the maggots who accuse her of various things and have no proof it gets a bit old and i have been keeping out on Jaynes wishes but a mans allowed to be fucked off lool cheers Snake

Beauregard

15 years 11 months ago

LOL

If I can nominate her, I don't see why you can't! I love me some Jayne! ;) But I suppose they wouldn't be implementing that rule into the guidelines if someone wasn't abusing the nominations so that they and their "friends" could share spotlight (and enjoy a good old fashioned game of penis fencing while in the limelight, I'm sure). Kelsey "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Allan Poe

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Kelsey the new guidelines

Kelsey the new guidelines ask that we dont nominate anyone we have a substanial connection to ... and they dont come any closer than Snake lol so I asked him for my sake not to Nom me anymore ... pmsl bit ridiculous since some of my poems get over a hundred votes and like ones going to make a difference but so the Nazi's cant whine and whinge and piss and shit and moan its better this way ... if we dont give them fuel they cant try and burn me at the stake again rotflmfao love and big hugs JayCee x x x (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

lmao

Sneaky Snake lol 5.15am wtf where you doing up at that ungodly hour lol see you got to meet Kels ... shes like Betty huh ?? lol glad you liked it baby love JayCee x x x (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

jetz

15 years 11 months ago

I’m not related….I can

I'm not related....I can nominate this. I normally like my poetry to be less abstract. My life is already full of enough "WTF's"...I actually, think this got through....(imagine that!)

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Sue

I like life to be real but its here in my poems I can escape into my imagination lmao thanks for the nom glad you liked it hun and I am very happy it got through sometimes I know mine are a little scattered but thats just me big smile love JayCee (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

magics02

15 years 11 months ago

gOOD ONE

Nice here felt it the whole way through too. Kudos once again Jayne Love,Mona xoxox

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Mona

thanks so much for the read hun lol just was at your page went right back to the very first poem you submitted .. I left a comment for you hun love and big hugs JayCee x x x x x x x btw wheres my chocie lol hahaha hmmm buggar you I am going to have to get someone to go buy me chocolate and thats your fault lmfao ~!~!~! smile (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

DawningDaytripper

15 years 11 months ago

Brillant write, I find

Brillant write, I find nothing here to critque, and I love me some Jayne too. I feel for ya and hope that we move past these sorts of nusiance's soon. Karma is a powerful tool, and when others try to act, karma will react in equal or greater force. For good and.... not so good. Since I am a strong believer in Karma I find a huge security with it. And also offer it a large respect. Powerful shit. he-he. I love this poem, all should know that. Julie D.D.

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

funnily enough I am over it

funnily enough I am over it I wrote this one the other day ... but I feel better now lol ... just felt hurt and bruised and I always get emotional on the page when I do that lol ... Karma has found me and pounded my head against the rocks I know she can catch you I dont play with karma unless I am feeling fearless lol love you Jules thanks for the wonderful comment and no crits from you and Kels ? is a big fat WOW for me (hugs) love JayCee x x x (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

nothing more to say

but oi oi oi love judd xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Judd

So sorry for the late reply hun only just noticed by chance lol was looking at poems to edit oi oi oi back atcha hun love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)