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Jun 17, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

STORM BITS

  Summer days
      moisture's haze
           thunder brays
                lightning's laze

                 Sun goes
                      thunderhead grows
                             windows close
                                   wildlife knows
                  
                                     Hard wind
                                          trees bend
                                                 warnings send
                                                             picnic's end

                                                                 pouring rain
                                                                         loud refrain        
                                                                                  hail's pain
                                                                                            river's gain
                                                                                                     
                                                                                                         House shakes
                                                                                                                       bough breaks
                                                                                                                                     drowns snakes
                                                                                                                                                       knee quakes
                                                                                                                       
                                                                                                                                                          rains slack
                                                                                                                                                            clouds wrack
                                                                                                                                                                blue crack
                                                                                                                                                                suns back

cool blows
   run-off flows
   storm goes
  rainbow glows         


                                                                                                                                                            
                                                                                                                                                                     
                                                                                                                                                                       
                                                                                                                                                                          
                                                                                                                                                                    
 
  
 


                                                                                                                                                                   
                                                                                                                                                                      
                                                                                                                                                                        
                                                                                                                                                                       
    
  
     
      
     
   
  
— scribbler, Jun 17, 2010

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Tornado's

Loved your concrete poetry stan brava :) love JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
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anonymous1

16 years 1 month ago

That's what it's called!

JayCee, We were trying to figure out the name for the form of the poem. I thought is was shape poetry but when I read your comment about it being concrete poetry, it seemed more familiar to me. (Stan put it up in the forum first, or a blog, can't remember now) Stan, it looks a little different, more like a tornado as JayCee suggests. I really like it. Lisa
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Lisa

we are both right ... lol shape or concrete poetry are both vaild but most people call it concrete ... Stan I thought your poem was the lead up to a tornado lol thats why I said tornado lmao ... argh well we readers do take our own meanings from things glad I could help lol love and hugs to you both JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
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scribbler

16 years 1 month ago

bits

Western Classic OR Free Verse ?
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scribbler

16 years 1 month ago

bits

Added one verse which required re-spacing toward end.Should have known I didn't come up with something different lol.appreciate both reads........scribbler
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scribbler

16 years 1 month ago

bits

I knew it had to have a name! thanks for supplying it and for read.......scribbler
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Scribe

I like this poem and do you know how to make a circle poem perhaps? This is really good and I loved the wording. hope all is well by you Peace Mona xoox
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scribbler

16 years 1 month ago

bits

Didn't know I was making a "concrete" poem lol.Just thought I'd go for extreme minimalism in a new format.Who knew? Glad you liked and thanks for visit.....Stan
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shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

L:O:L wonderful!

well this was a delight to read stan and i love the form very enjoyable much love shirl...... Storm bits great title! shirley harrison
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scribbler

16 years 1 month ago

bits

Stumbled up on form to keep "bit" verses from being too linear.Title from subject and verse length.Thanks for kind words.........scribbler

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