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Thulisile
Jun 17, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

TOO SCARED

WHAT are you scared of ?
I'm scared of my shadow
ever getting the upper hand
when I walk down the road
directing the motion of my head  
and the direction of my feet

I'm scared of my dreams 
become a reality 
I know not  how to handle 
 nor overcome

I'm scared of rejection
she has left a
scathing wound
and countless insecurities in me

I'mscared of freindship and love
their companianship
will require for me to become
something I'm scared of ever become .........A human being.





— Thulisile, Jun 17, 2010

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Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

“Something I am scared of

"Something I am scared of ever becoming ... a human being" has a better flow for me but all in all wonderful ... still a five star write love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Professor Purple

Professor Purple

15 years 11 months ago

Very enjoyable. Some parts

Very enjoyable. Some parts seem to speak of my own life. A few details though: "I’m scared of my dreams become a reality" would be better, grammatically, as "I’m scared of my dreams becoming (a) reality" (the "a" is optional, I find it flows better without it) And for the last stanza, "I’mscared of freindship and love their companianship will require for me to become something I’m scared of ever become ………A human being." 3 typos: "I'm scared" "friendship", and "companionship". And, as Seren mentioned, "of ever becoming" would be preferable, in terms of grammar. But all in all, an excellent piece. Antoine