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GRAY SHADOWS

While walking through the woods one day
  surrounded by deep summer's green
  I found myself quite far away
  from any place I'd ever seen

I wasn't lost or turned around
  (having compas and a map)
  no need for searchers on the ground
  thus avoiding"lost" mishap

On top a hill to my surprise
  was an abandoned family plot
  miles distant from most folks eyes
  by even kin it was forgot

I paused to take a closer look
  for chimney or abandoned church
  near to this hill above a brook
  amid thick stand of pine and birch

In seeing none I scratched my head
  why put a graveyard here ?
  who chose to put their newly dead
  where nothing else was near

I noted then that huge oak trees
  were growing at each corner
  I knew the planter had to be
  a long forgotten mourner

Squatting down I tried to see
  by study of headstones
  what family's plot that this might be
  whose lonely, buried bones ?

But all the headstones were just rocks
  half buried and unmarked
  interspersed by random hollyhocks
  giving no hint from where they harked

Upon a much,much closer look
  when were they last alive?
  same year of death they all partook
  scratched deep was 1865

Rising then I understood
  all six graves were brothers
  buried here in somber wood
  by grieving rebel Mother

The reason for no sign of home ?
  destroyed by troops in blue
  the reading of this long lost tome
  now easy to construe

For just a moment I thought I heard
  e'en now believe perhaps
  in stillness breeze left undisturbed
  a sad and distant "taps"

I turned to leave chill bumps behind
  and seek a much more sunny spot
  where sunshine's light would leave me blind
  I hurried 'way at a slow trot

Yet still I seem to think about
  these brothers late at night
  and how they died with Rebel shout
  fighting for what they thought was right
 
— scribbler, Jun 16, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Critiques

xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Brilliant Stan

A very interesting, creative and enjoyable write; a little sad too. There are so many unmarked graves of the forgotten brave people who have died, been buried and gone unnoticed in the midst of conflict. I love the title too. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

shadows

thank you so much for reading and kind comments.I have lost count of small graveyards I've run across abandoned and overgrown in these red hills......scribbler
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

Brava :) one of your best my friend I am not going to crit today Im feeling like crap lol getting the flu love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

shadows

AHA! all that overheated writing made you sick lol.thanks for generous remarks and hope you get to feeling better......scribbler
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

15 years 11 months ago

Hi Scribbler, I did enjoy

Hi Scribbler, I did enjoy your read. Very amazing story to put to paper. I did stumble in a few spots for flow, and the only judge I used for this is how is sounded saying it out loud. So use what you need, and don't worry about the rest. S in the review is stanza and L is Line, lol Stanza 3 line 4, I felt the flow would have been assisted if you adjusted By even relatives forgot By even relatives t'was forgot In S4 L4, pine and birch are trees, I think would flow better as amidst thick trees of pine and birch amidst the pines and birch S8 L4 they gave no hint from where they harked, runs long no hint from where they might hark S10 L1 You have brother, should be brother(s) S10 L4 by grieving Rebel mother by a grieving rebel Mother S11 L3 tome is , tomb S11 L4 now easy to construe, not easy to construe, S13 L2 and seek more sunny spot and seek a more sunny spot Despite the corrections, I really liked this poem and thank you for the opprotunity to have tore it up, sorry if I did so to much. Julie D.D.
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

suggestions

thanks for suggestions except S11 L3 where tome=story,I will consider all.As I've said before, I seldom consider any of my stuff to be truly finished......scribbler
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wolf

15 years 11 months ago

It kept my attention from

It kept my attention from the first word to the last, I wish I could see the place your writing about, it sounds enchanting and mysterious, a masterpiece of writing this is, brilliant and inspiring. Wolf.
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

places

thanks for time to read and comment.Unfortunately the place I wrote of is numerous as I've walked up on many such derelict resting places......scribbler
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

shadows

wonderful story Dear Stan, i enjoyed reading this very much, i go for hikes in the country, quite alot, and i too have found some grave sites of old! i find them quite facinating much love shirley harrison
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

shadows

I guess they must be everywhere.Appreciate your read and comment.have a good day.....scribbler
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

WoW Stan

I love your update... 5 more stars ***** Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

shadows

thanks Zena.Nothing ever really "finished" as I never fail to see room for improvement.........scribbler