Kailashana

Jun 15, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

poetry is like this

honed on a whetstone
like arrows to the heart
poetry is like this

but we live in an anteroom
and Jesus is waiting for us to
walk across the water, he has
towels in one hand and
a gleam in his eye

he's waiting for you to write a perfect poem
to shoot you down
from heaven
but you have not wings,
words are all you have
to give your heart away.*

— Kailashana, Jun 15, 2010

Critiques

Beauregard

16 years 1 month ago

That second stanza

just shot an arrow of words through my skull and I liked it. I can't think of anything else to say. Kelsey

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

I was aiming for your foot.

I was aiming for your foot. Sorry. ;-) ~ "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

jetz

16 years 1 month ago

Yep, we all have one….an

Yep, we all have one.... an opinion. Isn't it rather like music? What one person likes, certainly may not appeal to everyone.

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

You can count on that being

You can count on that being true! ~A "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

Arrow

16 years 1 month ago

Arrows to the heart--

how could I disagree? :) It is, I think, "an" anteroom. Jesus as "he" (vs. He) -- accidental? purposeful?, just as long as it's not thoughtless. *he’s waiting for you to write a perfect poem to shoot you down This reminds me of the part in War and Peace where the Russian general dies after defeating Napoleon in Russia. His work was done and so he died. That's the down-side of perfection/completion.

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

It’s not like that,

It's not like that, really. It's a fear we have. Being God-like bears great responsibility and few of us are willing to bear. And I never reference JC (not Jayne-Chloe) as he, he's my elder brother. ~A "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Totally missed the an

Totally missed the *an* reference yesterday. Mea Culpa and thanks. ~ "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Wow .. I am sleep dep, but I

Wow .. I am sleep dep, but I will come back later tonight just wanted to make my mark now, the arrow of your words found my heart ... brilliant poem Ma love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Nite, JC, many hugs.

Nite, JC, many hugs. ~ "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

its 1pm … I only had

its 1pm ... I only had three-four hours sleep lol going to come back when my minds a little clearer I am going in for a time out like a good girl :) love you Ma JayCee x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Lonnie

16 years 1 month ago

This one deserves praise!

and here I am to give it! Great, readable poetry, Anna! You have tweaked our composite consciousness with these memorable lines! I am awed!

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Stop that! I’ll start

Stop that! I'll start walking on water. Smile. ~ "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

Dalton

16 years 1 month ago

nice to have a poem from you

nice to have a poem from you with a reference to Jesus. i'm working on one myself that marks his recognition of the sacred feminine. love all your writes. john

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Much of my early poetry was

Much of my early poetry was infused with my Catholic background, quite spiritual. I did include references to other spiritual traditions. *Sacred feminine* was given a nod by the inclusion of a new dogma: Virgin Mary during the Dark Ages. Sadly, that's all it was given. Witness the Inquisition. ~A "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

pleiades

16 years 1 month ago

penultimate linewords

penultimate line; words 'are' all you have... you had me from 'honed on a whetstone' brava cheers p

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Indeed. I am a word made

Indeed. I am a word made flesh. ;-) ~ "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Anna Wonderful

you are a true insperation to me Anna, i have to say! much love shirley harrison

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

...the song of the warblers echoing through the tall woods

Ann of Norway I walked across water today on the long lake not far from here, the glints of light like stars strewn on its surface and the song of the warblers echoing through the tall woods that frame the lake, the lake of life where poetry lies waiting to be versed and conversed and thrown out of its heavenly tower, the mind, and for us to find like precious gems written here by our friends, like you my sister Anna, Anna Anna, Ann.

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