Jun 15, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dirt-bag

it's not you it's me
that is just another excuse
it should be
it's not me it's you
it's your asinine behaviors
your diabolical attitude
your total douchbaggery

i just need some time for myself
another bullshit line
one that i will never use with you
in all actuality it's
i just need to get away from you
just need a stable relationship
just need a person that supports me
i need some love and tenderness
need some tear free days

you lied to me
you treated me like dirt
you serial cheated on me
you were never once honest
you made me cry
you made me feel like i was was nothing
you said i meant nothing to you

i forgave you of all of that
thought that i would be able to trust you
gave you my heart
i fooled myself into thinking that you were honest
let down my guard with you
made myself comfortable with you
i did things with you that i have done with no-one else
let you become my life
let you own a part of my soul

make one little mistake and you disappear
you throw me to the curb
shove me off to the side
say your busy
you say your with your kid
DO NOT use her as an excuse
i love her more than i did you

that will NEVER EVER happen again
i am done
done with the excuses
done with all of the apologies
you should buy them in bulk
do with thinking that i am worth something to you
done with this relationship
done with every thing
you just a stupid boy

you lost the best thing that ever could happen to you
lost out on what could have been something good
you will never meet another girl that fits with you as well as i did
you just had to take me and break me down
i am like a wild mustang
i have a very strong spirit
you almost broke it
i am gone
you will no longer fence me in

do not call me
do not text me
when you see me on the street
do not talk to me
do not email me
do not IM me
you may have thought me a bitch before

that was nothing compared to how it will be now
we are no longer lovers
hell
we are not even friends anymore
i want nothing to do with you
if it concerns your daughter i will hear you out
other than that i want nothing
nothing from you
nothing of you
you are just a worthless DIRT-BAG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

— RobeccaJane Lee-Murchison, Jun 15, 2010

About This Poem

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Region, Country: New York, USA

Critiques

Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Good Rant, but should be a Blog!

You've got a good theme going here, Becca, but, and this is just my OPINION, it would be better off as a blog than a Poem! Please do not be upset as I am just trying to give you honest feedback to help you grow as a poet, okay? When you write, you should also try to minimize the use of "I", as it tends to make a piece seem very self-centered! I hope this helped, and as I said, I do like the theme!

DawningDaytripper

15 years 11 months ago

That was a great rant at the

That was a great rant at the ex Becca! And I love the word DOUCHBAGGERY!! That is awesome, I will remember that for a long time! Very nice vocab, and flow to it all, Julie D.D.

RobeccaJane Le…

15 years 11 months ago

thank you

thank you guys i appretiate it, and douchbaggary is my favorite word julie, i have always wanted to put it is one of my works, and i finally worked it in there, and let me tell you it feels great. but thanks for the feedback guys i really appretiate it. MUAH

mona

15 years 11 months ago

WOW

this is very good work my friend Jane ,listen to Lonnie ,because he is an great poet and expert. I loved your work,and waiting for more.

RobeccaJane Le…

15 years 11 months ago

OMG

why thank you mona, love that you liked it. i thought that i vented too much in it as well as lonnie, but, i left it to see what everyone else thought about it. guess i know now. lol thank you kindly for taking the time to read and comment my work. all of yous. love you all.

weirdelf

15 years 11 months ago

the first stanza rocks

the rest of the poem declines a little, robecca, good content but reads like prose Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,

RobeccaJane Le…

15 years 11 months ago

i appretiate the honesty

i appretiate the honesty jess, even if it knocks me down. lol MUAH CHEEKY JSS "please someone help me, its not healthy for me to feel this, Y-O-U, are making this hard, you got me tossing and turnin, late in the night!!!!!;)" Rhianna. PS you know who you are, and trust me this is a good thing;)

Alice Ember

15 years 11 months ago

Hey Girl, this rocked

Can I kick the crap out of him a little please, PLEASE? I need to kick some ones butt before i lose my mind.!!! Douchbaggery!! Hahaha i remeber you calling me that a couple of times, this was anawsome rant. I hope your okay Love you my friend keep in touch Cowards aren't the only ones who die a thousand deaths. Sometimes heroes do to

RobeccaJane Le…

15 years 11 months ago

will do

yeah i am fine hun, but thanks for asking, i just neede to get all of that out of my system, before i killed him myself, and yes you are more than welcome to beat him up for me, more than once if you would like. ;) i love you too, my little vampire girl, and i am going to miss seeing you brooding face in school everyday. lol. text me sometime, 645-2646, this is my girl sabrinas number, but is the only one that i got until i get my new phone. lol MUAH CHEEKY JSS "please someone help me, its not healthy for me to feel this, Y-O-U, are making this hard, you got me tossing and turnin, late in the night!!!!!;)" Rhianna. PS you know who you are, and trust me this is a good thing;)

Alice Ember

15 years 11 months ago

hmmm...

Yes!!! Finally, I can kick someones butt. I've had a serious withdrawl with my fights lately and I've been losing my ever loving mind!! I'm not quite sure if I should be offended by you talking 'bout my brooding face. Vampire girl, hmm.. I can live with that as long as I only have to take a bit out of a hot guys neck, no girls please, gah even thinking 'bout it makes me sick. You and Sarah are the ones who kept me some what sane this year thank you. "cause lets face it if I hadn't of had you guys grabbing me everytime some jerk started in on me I'd probably be more banged up then I was this year. And I probably would have hung myself in Ms. Kings room if you hadn't helped me. I was 'bout two more ratio's away from taking a leap at Ms. King. You guys saved some of my sanity this year so, thanks I'm sure i'll need it some other time. Lots of love Cowards aren't the only ones who die a thousand deaths. Sometimes heroes do to

Mark

15 years 11 months ago

one hell of a rant becca !

give it hell girl ! Mark people who hate attract people who hate and in the end they all end up hating each other

weirdelf

15 years 11 months ago

give me a reminder if I haven't got back to you within 7 days

when my ISP gets back to speed and I'll try to give more concrete suggestions, Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,

RobeccaJane Le…

15 years 11 months ago

Alice

trust me i know how you feel, if it were not for you and keirsten, i would have done the sane to Mr.Chase. i was about one more boring book away from drowning him in one of the men's room toilets. lol. glad that i could be of assistance to you! and it was a compliment, i promise you that, i love your brood, lol. :D oh and i promise, no females or ugly guys, just the CUTE ONES. ;) i got your back on that one hun. lol. LOVE, LOTS OF IT MUAH CHEEKY JSS "please someone help me, its not healthy for me to feel this, Y-O-U, are making this hard, you got me tossing and turnin, late in the night!!!!!;)" Rhianna. PS you know who you are, and trust me this is a good thing;)

RobeccaJane Le…

15 years 11 months ago

thanks

thank you Mark and Jess, i really appretiate it! an trust me Mark i will give him hell. he is going to hate me by the time me and my friends are done with him. his cousin is even in on my little scheme, which i am thinking about giving up on, since i met someone new, and in like tottally L-O-V-E crushed out on him, bad!! just does not feel worth my time and energy anymore! ;) MUAH CHEEKY JSS "please someone help me, its not healthy for me to feel this, Y-O-U, are making this hard, you got me tossing and turnin, late in the night!!!!!;)" Rhianna. PS you know who you are, and trust me this is a good thing;)