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raj
Jun 15, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

The Promise of Spring

You breezed in my Life
whispering "Spring" and
promised me Daisies and Violets
little could I hear 
in my feathery slumber
a storm brewing "deceit"..

I was deaf to its thunder 
blind to its lightning
till it sweeped my dream away
my Daisies were choking 
and Violets weeping
bleeding on the bed of hail

As I gather my Daisies and
kiss my blue Violets
in the promise of Spring they heal
the storm has now passed and
clouds have cleared
I am ready for your whispers again...


Believe in Spring and the promise of Love it brings..
raj (sublime_ocean)..








 


 

 

— raj, Jun 15, 2010

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xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Nice one Raj

Some really nice images...I love it. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Rosina

thank you for visiting and leaving an appreciative comment but i was not feeling too comfortable with the original script and if you happen to visit again you will notice that i have spruced it up with quite a few touches hither and thither... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

WoW Raj

Now it's perfect. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
BW

Bluesky Woman

16 years 1 month ago

nice, Raj

This is a wonderful poem, Raj.... it is so bittersweet, but of course I love the fact that in the end, he is ready again to love.... it is so hopeful. Thanks for sharing this, it feels straight out of your heart... and the imagery is very nice. (I am ready for the whispers again..... :) Love, Leigh "The true miracle is not walking on water or walking in air, but simply walking on this earth." Thich Nhat Hanh
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Leigh...

thank you for stopping by and for your comment... hugz... raj (sublime_ocean)
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Winters in Ohio are brutal.

Winters in Ohio are brutal. Spring is welcomed. This past year some friends told me love will come again. It did. He's here. Raj, a poem for all seasons when the memories, the scents, the sounds, the touch of spring is yearning itself. For you Raj: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bbcKO92OGNI&feature=related Ever So Lonely-Sheila Chandra The ultimate measure of a man is not where he stands in moments of comfort, but where he stands at times of challenge and controversy. ~ Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr.
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

Hello Kailasana...

thank you for your lovely comment...and for sending me the youtubelink.... hugz... raj (sublime_ocean)...
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ShePra

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Friend…I love spring.

Dear Friend... I love spring. Everything comes to life again but yes hail storms are not really far. So many time I have witness it & your poem was the perfect picture. I simply loved it Raj. It’s beautifully written or I can say it’s an art piece. You made me to glide back to beautiful spring with so many roses & daisies... Yes love is to be re-embraced & bask after any tempest...
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

Than you ShePra...

very nice of you for your lovely comment and inspiring words...i am looking forward to read your next write..make it soon... hugz...raj (sublime_ocean)...
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear raj

Wounded by the storm but ready to pick up and start over again. A great message in this piece. I love it. Always, Cat
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you Cat...

Thank you for your comment and appreciation....there is so much to learn isn't it from the seasons which come and go and return again... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)..
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Lovely

I love Srping, too....this is a beautiful poem about my favorite season...just lovely! Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
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raj

16 years ago

Hello Faith

thanks you for passing by and leaving a nice comment...if my poem has taken you to your favourite season i feel happy about it... may you always revel in the blush of spring and inhale the lovely fragrance it brings.. raj(sublime_ocean)..
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raj

16 years ago

Hi again Faith..

since you mentioned your love of spring...i thought i would tell you about one more of Spring i posted just yesterday... raj (sublime_ocean)

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