Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Z

RELEASE

Someone who felt it all but now feels nothing
dwelling so deep within partly unaware blank
stare hardly cares nothing to share,
A life that came to a shuddering halt.

Gave it all and it walked away
now it can`t come back it`s not the way,
a dancing flame now just burning embers
still young but as Grey as December.

Losing your frown as daylight fades
what drives us on compounds you
fenced in with nothing to distract,
no one else behind closed doors that
might react detect the facts.

Follow the cracks lacking yet still impressive
immersed in idle distraction screaming within
to be heard, where echoes fall silent no point
in violence.

Finding comfort within the peace but
still headstrong so where is the release.
— ziggy, Jun 15, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Country/Region: IRL

More from this author

Critiques

xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Sounds like a lonely kind of poem, like your in your own space, time and era. Like your lovely new pic, you look like you're staring out into the sky in deep thought. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
Z

ziggy

15 years 11 months ago

HI THERE

hi cheers for this comment i am going to take this of as i have used some of it in a rewrite cheers again for my comment , funyn that about my pic change its my old pic still as i see it .............zigs
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Ziggy

I feel this poem deep inside my bones. You have really struck a chord with this piece. I'm sure many will relate. Great work and the last two lines are killer! Always, Cat
Z

ziggy

15 years 11 months ago

hi

hi cat i am glad you read this one many emotions running through this one i hope lol, glad you like the ending cheers cat as ALWAYS ,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Professor Purple

Professor Purple

15 years 11 months ago

Impressive! Some moments in

Impressive! Some moments in life are hard to describe but you do so extemely well! I agree the last two lines are especially strong. For release, well time and poetry will help I'm sure. Antoine
Z

ziggy

15 years 11 months ago

hi

hello there and thank you for the comment when i write a piece like this i sort of dream up a situation and take it from there, this would not be a reflection of me i seldom write about me lol, and thank you again for the read cheers have a good weekend ,,,,,zigs
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Hi Ziggy!

I see you have updated this poem. It flows much more smoothly now. Always, Cat
Z

ziggy

15 years 11 months ago

hi

LOL, cheers cat glad you noticed glad you returned to this one i hope your having a nice weekend chat soon ,,,,,,,zigs x