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lou
lou

Petty Little Dictator

You held your family down with your physical presence,
humungous ego ,and pocket size intellect
you were as aggressive as a pit bull

You thought you were so smart
the way you swaggered and intimidated us
but we were just kids

Now we are all fully grown, we are strong
we contain the might to smite you down where you stand
we can slay you and cut down to size, slice you from side to side
thrash, mash , and bash you with our verbal cut and thrust

You are the  tiny insignificant , scab that had to be picked
you're the fleas on my dog, you're the irritating tick
you're  the monster in my closet, that had to be slain

Life is a great leveler, and what goes around comes around
Karma is my last word





 

— lou, Jun 15, 2010

About This Poem

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Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Critiques

Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Lou

I think your last word needs to be stronger Lou like monster or something like that ?... just obtuse leaves me hanging a little ... I lived with a man like this my ex husband I know what its like great write just that last word for me but it maybe just me? see what the others say love JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Jayne

I see your point, I will think again love lou xx
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

i'm scared!!!!

wonderful angry Poetry Lou, much love shirley harrison
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Don't be scared

sometimes its good to get the anger out. much love lou xx
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

i think i would finish this with

'if you were a word you would be shit' or something stronger even - as jc says 'obtuse' doesn't really say what i think you mean (just me though lou - i love this write - very powerful in representing the hurt and anger caused) love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Judy

Thank you love lou xx
DD

diana duncan

15 years 11 months ago

Dictator

Very powerful, Lou. I agree with the others about your last word. I personally don't like swear words for poetry so I wouldn't use "sh.t" but I get Judy's point. I would use "dust" (to rhyme with trust) with the idea that the dictator can be blown away with a word. Or "dirt" - I hate being treated like dirt.
S

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

last line

"of any goodness you show lack" perhaps?It seems if you list shortcomings the words should be more scathing .of course very good as is.........scribbler
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Scribbler

I wanted to come at it from a different angle. thank you lou xx
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Straight talking

You gave it to him right between the eyes...well done Lou. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Xena

Thanks xx
Geezer

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

Karma

I like that you can write about this, and you did it very well. There are many people that can't speak of such things. I do have a few critisims though. 1] It would be [fleas] on my dog 2] [you're] the irritating 3] [you're] the monster 4] had to be [slain] I do understand about the use of the word karma. Letting him know, that you know he will get his just reward, when the day of reckoning comes. Keep on keeping on, Love ya, ~ Gee xx
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Gee

thanks love louxx
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

U MAY LIKE TO RECONSIDER AT UR DISCRETION

FOR POCKET SIZE READ SPERM SIZED AND smite u down when.... ''''''' now when u rs doesn't stand..... such guys deserve the spermicide genetic print out what fuckin men they all these 10000000000000 years have and still1000000000000000000 years hence will fckk women just a food for thought when u give vent make it a large hole a crater like dent dent
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Sperm Sized

I prefer pocket sized , thanks for your suggestions. love lou xx
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

i always read urs ur

..a great individual person i love it Thank you all for your lovely moral support I live on your shoulders as you read over mine and I love to thank each one individually hope you don’t mind I am unable to render such attention I wonder is time a limitation I shall try to solve my miscalculation till then abide with me I am a loner come ride with me