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ShePra
Jun 15, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

The house I live within

The house I live in is

Strong to the wind

But too weak for emotions to dwell within

Thick walls do stop the rain to come in

But can’t stop the loud voices within

Strong walls break the mighty winds

But too weak to hold the laughter within

House divided into rooms

Ah! People also divided within

The window & the doors are left with no paints

So is love lacking within

 

This is the house I live within

People say

How huge is your house

 How beautiful within

But nobody knows

How cold is it

Within...

— ShePra, Jun 15, 2010

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Ravenshakti

Ravenshakti

16 years 1 month ago

Hello ShePra...

Your poem is so lovely... And so very insightful... Exquisite work, my friend. I make awareness, my home. Gentle regards, Raven-Shakti "When you stand outside my thatched hut, Could you guess how spacious it is inside? There is a galaxy of worlds in here. And space for as much love as I can find." -Ishikawa Jozan (17th century), from a Zen poem, Japan
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ShePra

16 years 1 month ago

Hi there, Well it is the

Hi there, Well it is the tale of every house; you felt it the way I have written it... I am honoured .. Thanks a lot Warm regards ShePra
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

Hi ShePra

i liked the theme of your write which portrays your emotions so very well...i recommend though that you take a re-look at your write and tweak it up a little more...which will make it even more beautiful.. warmly ...raj (sublie_ocean)
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

Hi ShePra

i liked the theme of your write which portrays your emotions so very well...i recommend though that you take a re-look at your write and tweak it up a little more...which will make it even more beautiful.. warmly ...raj (sublime_ocean)
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Dar ShePra

This is another great one. I love your writer's voice. It's so genuine! Great title, very good diction with a powerful delivery. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

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