lou

Jun 14, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Dip Your Biscuits in my Gravy

You create more heat than any heat supply
you have the recipe I need
one part man two parts pure emotion
a pinch of spice is all we need to perfect the concoction

You ignite the devil in me, i want to take a bite out of you and gobble you up
I want you to dip your biscuits in my gravy
I want to lick every morsel you've got

You are the ingredients for my banquet
you are the starter , main course and my dessert
your all that's on my menu
you've got the lot

— lou, Jun 14, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

Critiques

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Indi

Thank you , not sure if I was hungry or horny when I wrote this lol lou xx

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Yummy! Yummy! Yummy!Last

Yummy! Yummy! Yummy! Last paragraph has issues with you, your, and you're (a contraction for you are) You have the ingredients for my banquet you are (or you're) the starter, main course and (my) dessert you're all that’s on my menu you’ve got the lot (I wonder, how would it appeal to you if the last line were *and now I've got the hot*) Adore the title, Lou!!!!!!!!! ~ "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

lou

16 years 1 month ago

TY

Thank you love lou xx

Geezer

16 years 1 month ago

Other than...

the issues that Kailashana pointed out, this is an awesome menu! Sensual, full bodied, with a touch of hot sauce. Just the way I like it! Well done! Loved it, ~ Gee xx P.S. The title was great too!

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Gee

Thank you very much , I must of been a little peckish when I wrote this lol much love lou xx

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Lou L:O:L

wouldnt you kick him out of bed for eating biscuits I bet not! L:O:L i love your poetry of late, i imagine something is lighting your fire??????? but i'm sure i'll never know! good luck to you lou....much love shirley harrison

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Shirley

Nudge, nudge, wink, wink , say no more ! lol thank you so much love lou xxx

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Girl you sound ravenous lol

Girl you sound ravenous lol come down here we will find you a man hot poetry Lou nicceee ;) love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lou

16 years 1 month ago

JayCee

I wish you could find me a muscular Aussie man lol love lou xx

Put your Swiss Roll , in my cake tin ? lol

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

hi Lou

I'd say you have a pretty healthy appetite. Yummy! Always, Cat

lou

16 years 1 month ago

HI

I do get peckish lou xx

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

the appetite of sex

'I want you to dip your biscuits in my gravy' love it lou - very funny lol judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Judy

Thanks , a girl has to get satisfied some how lol lou xx

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