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TRYING ANYTHING ONCE (THE SEQUEL)

They say a poet at least should try
  every form beneath the sky
  not doing so retards his growth
  like its breaking poet's oath

So Japanese I guess I'll try
  "look it up" so that I
  won't come out as a total fool
  this form is just another tool

Haiku was there and something new
  a form that is called"Senryu"
  both governed more by length than flow            *no limit on title
  time to begin ,so here I go
                                  Title(for both poems)
EPIC TALE OF HAIR LOSS, SUBSEQUENT REALIZATION OF OWN MORTALITY FOLLOWED BY CAUTIOUS OPTIMISM
                                           (as translated by Kia Toyota)

haiku
  Where has my hair gone?
  guess this means my death is near
  I hope not too soon

senryu
  hair
     today
        gone
tomorrow

Whew!, now that was really tough
  title alone was quite enough
  to make my head ache half a day
  not too sure I like this way

Tense concentration made me sick
  took great effort to make verse click
  too limited amount of words to pick
  think I'll stay with my 'Classic"
— scribbler, Jun 13, 2010

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About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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xena465

xena465

15 years 12 months ago

He, he, he Stan

I don't know if you've done it correctly, but it sure looks and sounds great to me. I love the great humour you give to your attempts to new forms...I love it. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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scribbler

15 years 12 months ago

anything

"laugh and the world laughs with you " not much on rules in limited search.thanks for read and comment.......scribbler
xena465

xena465

15 years 12 months ago

Morning Stan

It's 4.30am here in Glasgow; I don't the time differences in other countries. I went to bed at 7pm last night, had a few too many tipples. I may try to go back to bed for a couple of hours more later on, but I’m wide awake now. I suppose I could catch up on all my soaps from last night. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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shirley harrison

15 years 12 months ago

so entertaining!

Dear Stan the man, this is really wonderful, and you kept me on my toes through out, very clever poetry and as you know i have been trying new stuff too! much love shirley harrison
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scribbler

15 years 12 months ago

anything

thanks shirley.hope your attempts are more legitimate than mine lol......scribbler
mand

mand

15 years 12 months ago

I don’t know anything

I don't know anything about haiku poetry but your poem was very cleverly done. Love Mand xxxx
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scribbler

15 years 12 months ago

haiku

thank you,Mand.All I know about it is required syllable count and difficulty in transmitting thoughts in very limited format........scribbler
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scribbler

15 years 12 months ago

sequel

hey Indi.Thanks for read and comment.I try to limit writing to what I know.Hmmm.may be running out of material soon lol.always good to hear from you......scribbler
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wolf

15 years 11 months ago

excellent, you seem a good

excellent, you seem a good sport to be at least willing to try different forms of poetry, humorous and fun to read, really enjoyed it.
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

sequel

thanks wolf.not all poetry need be deep or somber.......scribbler