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She laughed

 Dwindling thoughts
 to me a surprise
 by my looking down
 I see  it's size

she laughed at me 
and made a joke
as I had plunged 
with my final strokes!!!


.............. Water colors
— mantiscepter, Jun 13, 2010

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mantiscepter

15 years 11 months ago

Water colors

Hi Mona, Kinda cute don't you think!!! how have you been ? good I hope. great to hear from you, and am happy this was to your liking... John. thanx for commenting.
xena465

xena465

15 years 12 months ago

Ha, ha John

You had me worried at the start of the poem, then I got to the end...well done. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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mantiscepter

15 years 11 months ago

Funny

Hi xena good to hear from you. I hope that means you liked it. thanks for reading it and for your comments. talk soon, John
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mantiscepter

15 years 11 months ago

She laughed

Hey Mona. kinda funny, I thought people would enjoy that one, It is kind of slick, Eh. Thanks for the kind words and good to see your still rollin out here. talk soon John.
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear John

Very funny and clever my friend lol big smile love and hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
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mantiscepter

15 years 11 months ago

another bright light

Hi Seren, thanks for the read, glad you liked it. tell me how was your visit with miss lillian? so lovely. talk soon. Love John.
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

John

Shes a little beauty it was lovely to finally get to meet her after a dramatic day all round she finally arrived safe and sound ... I didnt have a cuddle but I did give her a kiss lol the night she was born I was giving the Grandparents and the parents room dote on her lol but I went back the next night and got a big cuddle ... shes going to be a beauty when she grows up Lyz was floating not walking John never seen a woman so estatic lol love to you JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
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mantiscepter

15 years 11 months ago

Sweet

Thanks so much its so nice to hear how things unfold, and it sounds like everyone was captured with the moment, thanks for writing back. and sharing the love with me. Love and huggs John.
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sammysew

15 years 11 months ago

Hi,I love how this unfolds!!

Hi, I love how this unfolds!! great read and brought a big smile to my face. Sammy x
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mantiscepter

15 years 11 months ago

Colors

Again we meet sammy, thanks for stopping in to read this poem, it was fun to write. and good to hear it was fun for you to read .. thanks again, see ya again. John, Mantiscepter
Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

Tsk tsk tsk. And you with

Tsk tsk tsk. And you with the red white and blue behind you! ;-) ~ The ultimate measure of a man is not where he stands in moments of comfort, but where he stands at times of challenge and controversy. ~ Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr.
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mantiscepter

15 years 11 months ago

thats right

Water Colors Got a new flag, and it's resting in the window behind my computer seat in full view. ready to be put out. Good to her from you. till we meet again. John