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Jun 12, 2010
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TIME TRAVELING
Easing down a worn deer trail
hope to collect a nice whitetail
four legged kind with mobile ears
(remove your minds from gutter , dears)
While glancing down at the worn track
my eyes move on and then come back
to rest upon an odd shaped stone
"an arrowhead" my lips intone
I pick it up off dusty ground
then for some reason look around
perhaps a spirit from the past
is freed from artifact at last
While turning flint within my hand
I think to pocket I'll remand
this ancient piece of hand chipped stone
(still feel as if I'm not alone)
For some strange reason I feel split
mostly here but just a bit
of me goes back to distant past
to meet point's owner there at last
In my mind I start to share
kinship with warrior way back there
we both are seeking the same prey
him back then and I today
In split screen we both now see
a buck behind a large oak tree
I see the point that haunts me so
fit to a spear (too big for bow)
The most of me that remains here
raises bow to shoot the deer
while back in time I watch the brave
draw back his spear, prepare to stave
As one the two now time-warped deer
take two more steps and thus do clear
the tree's protective wooden shield
their head and chest now both revealed
While drawing high-tech arrow back
once more I glance at the buck's rack
Indian focuses on his mark
antlers to him do not so hark
Release the arrow ! toss the spear !
spear flies true, arrow just near
one prey down, the other gone
I shake my head,"whats going on?"
The spell is broken, I'm alone
(shot bounced off of distant stone)
heart still racing, hands still shaking
deer I missed was mine for taking
I sigh and pick dropped stone point up
while swallowing nervuos hic-up
now back in just one space and time
still quiet as performing mime
Well this hunt is over now
I brush sparse hair back from my brow
turn around and walk away
I'll recall this as my indian day
hope to collect a nice whitetail
four legged kind with mobile ears
(remove your minds from gutter , dears)
While glancing down at the worn track
my eyes move on and then come back
to rest upon an odd shaped stone
"an arrowhead" my lips intone
I pick it up off dusty ground
then for some reason look around
perhaps a spirit from the past
is freed from artifact at last
While turning flint within my hand
I think to pocket I'll remand
this ancient piece of hand chipped stone
(still feel as if I'm not alone)
For some strange reason I feel split
mostly here but just a bit
of me goes back to distant past
to meet point's owner there at last
In my mind I start to share
kinship with warrior way back there
we both are seeking the same prey
him back then and I today
In split screen we both now see
a buck behind a large oak tree
I see the point that haunts me so
fit to a spear (too big for bow)
The most of me that remains here
raises bow to shoot the deer
while back in time I watch the brave
draw back his spear, prepare to stave
As one the two now time-warped deer
take two more steps and thus do clear
the tree's protective wooden shield
their head and chest now both revealed
While drawing high-tech arrow back
once more I glance at the buck's rack
Indian focuses on his mark
antlers to him do not so hark
Release the arrow ! toss the spear !
spear flies true, arrow just near
one prey down, the other gone
I shake my head,"whats going on?"
The spell is broken, I'm alone
(shot bounced off of distant stone)
heart still racing, hands still shaking
deer I missed was mine for taking
I sigh and pick dropped stone point up
while swallowing nervuos hic-up
now back in just one space and time
still quiet as performing mime
Well this hunt is over now
I brush sparse hair back from my brow
turn around and walk away
I'll recall this as my indian day
— scribbler, Jun 12, 2010
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Seren
15 years 12 months ago
Dear Stan
scribbler
15 years 12 months ago
time
judyanne
15 years 12 months ago
great scribble
scribbler
15 years 12 months ago
deer
shirley harrison
15 years 12 months ago
Stan just beautiful!
scribbler
15 years 12 months ago
traveling
xena465
15 years 12 months ago
Time travel...
scribbler
15 years 12 months ago
time traveling
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15 years 12 months ago
travelingt