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Jun 12, 2010
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TIME TRAVELING
Easing down a worn deer trail
hope to collect a nice whitetail
four legged kind with mobile ears
(remove your minds from gutter , dears)
While glancing down at the worn track
my eyes move on and then come back
to rest upon an odd shaped stone
"an arrowhead" my lips intone
I pick it up off dusty ground
then for some reason look around
perhaps a spirit from the past
is freed from artifact at last
While turning flint within my hand
I think to pocket I'll remand
this ancient piece of hand chipped stone
(still feel as if I'm not alone)
For some strange reason I feel split
mostly here but just a bit
of me goes back to distant past
to meet point's owner there at last
In my mind I start to share
kinship with warrior way back there
we both are seeking the same prey
him back then and I today
In split screen we both now see
a buck behind a large oak tree
I see the point that haunts me so
fit to a spear (too big for bow)
The most of me that remains here
raises bow to shoot the deer
while back in time I watch the brave
draw back his spear, prepare to stave
As one the two now time-warped deer
take two more steps and thus do clear
the tree's protective wooden shield
their head and chest now both revealed
While drawing high-tech arrow back
once more I glance at the buck's rack
Indian focuses on his mark
antlers to him do not so hark
Release the arrow ! toss the spear !
spear flies true, arrow just near
one prey down, the other gone
I shake my head,"whats going on?"
The spell is broken, I'm alone
(shot bounced off of distant stone)
heart still racing, hands still shaking
deer I missed was mine for taking
I sigh and pick dropped stone point up
while swallowing nervuos hic-up
now back in just one space and time
still quiet as performing mime
Well this hunt is over now
I brush sparse hair back from my brow
turn around and walk away
I'll recall this as my indian day
hope to collect a nice whitetail
four legged kind with mobile ears
(remove your minds from gutter , dears)
While glancing down at the worn track
my eyes move on and then come back
to rest upon an odd shaped stone
"an arrowhead" my lips intone
I pick it up off dusty ground
then for some reason look around
perhaps a spirit from the past
is freed from artifact at last
While turning flint within my hand
I think to pocket I'll remand
this ancient piece of hand chipped stone
(still feel as if I'm not alone)
For some strange reason I feel split
mostly here but just a bit
of me goes back to distant past
to meet point's owner there at last
In my mind I start to share
kinship with warrior way back there
we both are seeking the same prey
him back then and I today
In split screen we both now see
a buck behind a large oak tree
I see the point that haunts me so
fit to a spear (too big for bow)
The most of me that remains here
raises bow to shoot the deer
while back in time I watch the brave
draw back his spear, prepare to stave
As one the two now time-warped deer
take two more steps and thus do clear
the tree's protective wooden shield
their head and chest now both revealed
While drawing high-tech arrow back
once more I glance at the buck's rack
Indian focuses on his mark
antlers to him do not so hark
Release the arrow ! toss the spear !
spear flies true, arrow just near
one prey down, the other gone
I shake my head,"whats going on?"
The spell is broken, I'm alone
(shot bounced off of distant stone)
heart still racing, hands still shaking
deer I missed was mine for taking
I sigh and pick dropped stone point up
while swallowing nervuos hic-up
now back in just one space and time
still quiet as performing mime
Well this hunt is over now
I brush sparse hair back from my brow
turn around and walk away
I'll recall this as my indian day
— scribbler, Jun 12, 2010
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Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Stan
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judyanne
16 years 1 month ago
great scribble
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deer
shirley harrison
16 years 1 month ago
Stan just beautiful!
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xena465
16 years 1 month ago
Time travel...
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time traveling
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