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DawningDaytripper
DawningDaytripper
Jun 12, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Oral intricacies

I mouth each new letter into life

throwing out words and thoughts

precious seeds of literary passion

rooted in primal equations
 

They dance in shadowed patterns

growing from the composted

remains of fiction and biography

touching me on an omnipotent plain
 

Smell the verbs and taste the nouns

reveling in the rhythmic symmetry

frolic among the weeded extensions

breathing from each different blossom
 

Living in the prefix and suffix of it all

enthralledd by the deepest of meanings

each definition a conceptual bliss

in rapture of the profound conclusion…..

— DawningDaytripper, Jun 12, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

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Seren

Seren

15 years 12 months ago

Dear Julie

I just read this three times I cannot see anything I would change lol so I will come back later (as I do) lol and make sure I didnt miss anything I am tired this evening been cooking up a storm all day Jules this is one of your best and I dont say that lightly brilliant work :) smiles love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

15 years 12 months ago

So glad you liked it Jayne!

So glad you liked it Jayne! I had alot of fun with this and it just rolled write out, Thanks for liking and and stopping by. I hope you are feeling better soon, Luv ya bunch's, Julie D.D.
lou

lou

15 years 12 months ago

DD

A perfectly beautiful read. love lou xx
R

raj

15 years 12 months ago

Hello there..

a nice concoction of words your mind has brewed up here Julie in this write...i had more than a sip of it and enjoyed it...you have surely speckled your poetry with your knowledge of the english language and vocabulary... warmly ...raj (sublime_ocean)
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

15 years 12 months ago

Hello Raj, I am rather fond

Hello Raj, I am rather fond of this concoction. I am so glad you enjoyed it! And I try to use my vocabulary to compliment my work, and can only hope it does. We work with what we got, right? I just saw myself in spotlight. Wow, that has been a long long time, LOL. Thanks ya all! Julie D.D.
R

raj

15 years 12 months ago

You deserve the spotlight

You deserve the spotlight Julie..a testimony ofcourse of how much the readers have enjoyed / appreciated....which is most satisfying as well as inspiring..i am sure it would serve as tonic and inspire you to write more n share more .. raj (sublime_ocean)..
Seren

Seren

15 years 12 months ago

congrates on the light

congrates on the light Jules I am so happy to see you here you work hard and deserve it imho love ya bunchs girl JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
themoonman

themoonman

15 years 12 months ago

Julie...

I can see that it was a fun write, it was a fun read. Inventive and well written, enjoyed it very much this morning... left me smiling. Richard
Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 12 months ago

Julie, you have written a

Julie, you have written a masterpiece of blissful erudition. Well done! One for all poetry books! ~ "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi
Esker

Esker

15 years 12 months ago

One of the poets that stretchs and uses language use

You are always writing something different and always using correct words and spelling This I enjoy as the poem itself is then effortless to read I enjoy writing and the words love reading at the meetings but I am still quite lax at spelling a fun poem to read also Julie Your freind Esker~
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

15 years 12 months ago

My dear friend Esker, its

My dear friend Esker, its been so long! I am thrilled you enjoyed this. And it was very sweet of you to notice I try to write differantly everytime. If it is not a challenge and fun, then why bother. I could sit and mill out some stuff, but I doubt I would be very happy with it. Ok, I would like it, cause I like my own stuff {every poet should, or why bother}, but I find I like it best when I am pushing my own boundries, learnign new stuff. I do try to use the correct usages and such, but only because I love the sturcture of words the way I do, does it seem so smooth, and it not always so, LOL! Next maybe I will go with a mish mash of words not so clear maybe! Oh I can see it now, it will be great! Oh I could make it dark........SORRY! Just wandering the weeded extensions and breathing from each blossom and bloom See you have inspired me as usual Esker! Julie D.D.
xena465

xena465

15 years 12 months ago

Wow Julie

I can't pretend to understand about nouns, verbs etc, but boy I wish I did. How much easier it would be for me to write like this. Superb write Julie. PS. I’m often told it’s not too late to learn, but my wee brain is a little shrunken and refuses to expand, ha, ha, ha. Xena
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

15 years 12 months ago

I have no idea where my

I have no idea where my vocabulary started Rosina, I read verousiously as a child. But I actualy have very little knowledge of structure. I seek more everyday! Vocabulary is not the same as intimate knowledge of english. I am just a freak happy to find a way to express myself. I love words, definitions, flow, meaning, ie poetry and I think I got that across in the poem, LOL. As for my spelling. Jeesh, that requires alot of work and I make many mistakes still. But I have stopped using spell check on comments, and have less and less corrections daily! Of coarse I put every poem through it before posting to save my friends the trouble. Thanks for liking this poem Rosina. I think your work has tons of great words and meaning, don't be so hard on yourself. I see how much you put in all the time! Julie D.D.
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

15 years 12 months ago

Thanks Jess, your input is

Thanks Jess, your input is welcome, appreaciated and applied. He didn't correct me here ya all, he helped and told me in chat. But still gets props for helpin'! I wish more people came to chat, they don't know what they are missin! Julie D.D.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

15 years 11 months ago

Never knew grammar could be so beautiful DD:-

Ann of Norway Never knew grammar could be so beautiful DD. Julie I should have had you as my teacher as spewing out that dreaded complicated thing called grammar and all that STUFF, you make it seem to have colour in it after all. Yes you should have been the teacher at my early schools(7) and instilled in me a love of it- I'm blowed if I want to learn all the connotations of it now, it seems so terribly boring like hard work, memorising these laws and yet if you know them you have the world of language at your fingertips, like Joe! Ah well, I plead ignorance of much of it, it has seeped into me like the breezes of nature whispering in the trees the wisdom of words too. "rooted in a primal equations "......do you need A here? "breathing from each different blossoms".....do you need the S on blossom? "rolling amongst the deepest of meanings".....I think a simpler word here word suffice,AMONGST! Love to you from Ann.
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

15 years 11 months ago

Oh you have me blushing and

Oh you have me blushing and I am not so good at taking compliments Ann. My grammer is not natural, and much to be desired. I did not attend college and thought Grammer a waste of time. Little did I know at 18 what poetry could do for me. What I do know, its not formal. I know words, the feeling meaning. I have read thousands of books and hundreds of authors who have given me a wonderful feel for how they should flow together. I try my best to bring that out. But I have horrible grammer, lol. But loving words, and knowing grammer... well that is two seperate things. However that you liked and thought that so of this poem, my wonderful teacher, is the highest of compliments! Which is why I am blushing! Thank you so much, I had alot of fun writing this one. And I find emense enjoyment that it was communicated to my reader! Julie D.D.