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TimeIsNotAPromise
Jun 11, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

masks

i wear no mask but
i am not seen
is it that hard to see the real me
i do not hide behind a cape
still with the falseness of this world
i cannot escape
do you make me who i am
does what we hear change us
i am who i am
can't you see
i have no cover
so now do you see me
so what do you see?
— TimeIsNotAPromise, Jun 11, 2010
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themoonman

themoonman

16 years ago

Just One Dot...

Again, I like your chosen site name. This poem too, although it does need some work, but it revolves around a theme many can relate to. do you make me who I am (great line) or what you hear does (huh)(isn't quite clear) ending line is good, but I'd break up the "can't you see", give it its own line for the power of the statement. hope you don't mind my looking at your work. Richard
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TimeIsNotAPromise

16 years ago

not at all

thank you ,actualy this isnt my work a friend of mine wrote it and wanted some help with it so i let her post it here so someone could help out:) and she ended up just geting her own page Desu Haley
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TimeIsNotAPromise

16 years ago

not at all

thank you ,actualy this isnt my work a friend of mine wrote it and wanted some help with it so i let her post it here so someone could help out:) and she ended up just geting her own page Desu Haley

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