Seren

Jun 11, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Inheriting the Voice of a Goddess

I looked to the day
and her blue rimmed eyes
with a burning stare
in the walk of Adam's son,
and I am defeated

I looked to the night
finding the silent black
a mirror to my soul
I am Paleothea
and I am conquered

I look to the moon
as the fingers of my
spirit mind reach out
I brushed the profound
howling fulfillment
at the arrival
of my Imago

— Seren, Jun 11, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Ahhh…so….inspire:Main

Ahhh...so.... inspire: Main Entry: in·spire Pronunciation: \in-ˈspī(-ə)r\ Function: verb Inflected Form(s): in·spired; in·spir·ing Etymology: Middle English, from Anglo-French & Latin; Anglo-French inspirer, from Latin inspirare, from in- + spirare to breathe Date: 14th century transitive verb 1 a : to influence, move, or guide by divine or supernatural inspiration b : to exert an animating, enlivening, or exalting influence on c : to spur on : impel, motivate d : affect 2 a archaic : to breathe or blow into or upon b archaic : to infuse (as life) by breathing 3 a : to communicate to an agent supernaturally b : to draw forth or bring out 4 : inhale 1 5 a : bring about, occasion b : incite 6 : to spread (rumor) by indirect means or through the agency of anotherintransitive verb : inhale — in·spir·er noun Physician-reviewed articles on inspire on Healthline. 1. Inhalation anthrax (3 images) Inhalation (or respiratory) anthrax is an infectious dise... Retrieved June 11, 2010, from http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/inspire Imagio Dei (5/13/2010) Into the images of love, I turn, oh, sea! return me to the depth of myself let me see how You shine! ~ "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Into the images of love, I

Into the images of love, I turn, oh, sea! return me to the depth of myself let me see how You shine! wow .... again love JayCee ... ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

wonderful

now this is why i asked you for some help! and thank you for the excellent blog help! shirley harrison

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

You know I actually liked

You know I actually liked this one too lol which is something I cant always say ,.. you can thank Anna for this one I was going to post another poem but this one came from the heavens with a little help from her ;) glad I could help I love learning and I have always enjoyed teaching but my love is doing lol love and hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Superb JayCee

To look into deep into the eyes of love and find your soul again, to feel that sensation and put it into words, can only be exhilarating. Xena

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Xena

this ones inspired by Anna .. and it came from nowhere still needs some work but I am going to fix it up over the next couple of weeks love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Jayne

Nice work love lou xx

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks

JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

you write as a goddess jc

beautifully. - simply love the last three lines love judd xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Judd

I never felt like a goddess but I am Loved and for once in my life I know it and never doubt it :) and thats due to the people that inspire me and also the ones who make me work harder push me to the limit ... those last lines are inspired by Anna so if they are good its because they belong to her ;) in a round about way lol love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

love the title change

hugs judd xx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Judd

thanks for the inspiration ;) love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

That was great Jayne! I only

That was great Jayne! I only had issue with one little line You used "I" in to lines in a row, for me would read much better if you lost one and said I look to the moon as the fingers of my spirit mind reach out I brushed the profound I howl fulfillment at the arrival of my Imago I look to the moon as the fingers of my spirit mind reach out I brush the profound howling fulfillment at the arrival of my Imago In my humble opinion, it may read better. But this is a lovely write! Julie D.D.

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Julie

When I wrote that last bit I had howling to start with and I agree so I have already fixed it thanks for being honest i like it better without the other 'I' as well love and bunches of hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Mark

16 years 1 month ago

Like the master

I just read - amazed ! Mark Resilient Flexibility RUN; when there seems to be no answer common sense will not speak, so run - -go running..

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Mark

That is high Praise my friend thank you much appreciated big smile give Pat my love shes the sweetest lady love and big hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Jayne

What can I say when I am the last to say it? You are so "on", This piece feels inspired. Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Cat

Slowly coming back to myself felt out of sorts for weeks but im getting there hugs and big love and thanks JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

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