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WE DANCED A VISIT TO THE CEMETERY

 WE DANCED A VISIT TO THE CEMETERY (Inspired by Longo's "Family Reunions") 
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You took me to the graves of your ancestors, 

to understand your poem Joe,

but instead of night and dark and damp,

and woe, 

we danced,

 

you took my hand and led me in, 

we saw some great big stones,

some edifices strange and gaunt, 

along the avenues, at each cross

we did a spin, and wild flowers echoed too, 

as if they knew, 

for they are there from day to night 

and back to day again.

 

Then as the sun set in the west

the spectres came right out,

and soon a dance hall came about.

 

We hailed your mother's sisters, brothers, 

aunts and uncles too, 

and all came out to join us, prancing in the dew, 

then as we did the final waltz, 

sweet music could be heard, 

 

from all the leaves in every tree,

and even songs of birds,

and when the darkness swallowed all,

and blackness ruled the hour, 

it was as if we disappeared like dreams

contented so it seems,

 

as then we did retire, 

and left a spray of new white stars,

to decorate the tombs, 

where all their spirits blink and smile.

high up and out of sight, 

we whisper you a fond goodnight.



 

 

 

 


— Nordic cloud, Jun 10, 2010

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 12 months ago

I love this poem!Dance

I love this poem! Dance Macabre ~ Saint Saens http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-LupmmElMoI "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi
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Dalton

15 years 12 months ago

and because i also have a

and because i also have a fondness for graveyards, i can think of no more a fitting resting place for my body to reside. i have not visited your page as often as i should, i shall amend this. my favourite lines to this poem: "...and then we did retire and left a spray of new white stars, to decorate the tombs..." only tiny thing i might alter in the line: "From all the leaves in every tree and even songs of birds" I might have put: "and every singing bird" without the "s". it seems more fitting but that's just me being pernickity which i'm told i can sometimes be. a lovely read from you. john
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SophieHannah24

15 years 12 months ago

Cadence

Your rhythm is the only flaw to this near perfect write. Lovely altogether.
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magics02

15 years 12 months ago

Ann just awesome

You and Longo and the words, the imagery, sheds me a tear..just beautiful wording and feelings here Love,Mona
xena465

xena465

15 years 12 months ago

Just so like you Ann

To turn what’s normally thought of as a gruesome place into a wonderful reunion with the spirits of our dead ancestors. Nature is truly in your blood…Brilliant write Ann I thoroughly enjoyed this. Xena