Double Thunder's Roar

I sing softly
the songs of my core
would more understand
a thunderous roar?

Well, I'd roar up a storm
if I thought that were true
and spill chilling water on
...who knows who!

I'd blow out the blindness
from eyes filled of dew
bomblast the deaf- ear'd
who whine for thier due

I would shreik up a shroud
of bold doom day clouds
tongues would fall limp,
thus culling the crowd

more understood?
maybe... who knows?
still, I'll sing softly
the songs of my soul

— brittle light, Jun 10, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Hello

Nice to meet you. I don't know how this little gem of a poem got passed by. It is charming and has a very good message for all. Always, Cat

brittle light

16 years ago

and a hello to you

thank you for the generous comment. I have never been able to figure out why some pieces capture more attention than others (speaking of my own work). In a way that might be a good thing... keeping me on my toes, not trying to duplicate and re-duplicate, ad ifinitum...anyway, thank you again, for the comment, and taking the time to do so. AL p.s. I think I am going to turn into one of your fans; from what I've read of your work so far. please excuse me if I don't do a lot of commenting and replying...I have never been,(as an adult anyway) very gregarious.

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