Hell

Hell

No moon
No stars in sight
The sky is invisible
In this absence of light

No noise
Nothing moves
The world has come to a stop
As if waiting for its cue

No touch
All alone
Suspended animation
This place that I call home

Can you see what isn't there
Do you feel what I can't touch
If this place is really hell
Why do I visit it so much

— jetz, Jun 09, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: South eastern Connecticut, USA

Critiques

jetz

16 years 1 month ago

Sometimes that’s much

Sometimes that's much easier said then done, my friend. Thank you Dale for taking the time. much appreciated. Sue

jetz

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Dan, There was no

Thanks Dan, There was no need for you to PM your correction.(my correction?) This is a workshop. I appreciate your taking the time. and as for your last comment, cloudy here , with rain expected. Sue

wolf

16 years 1 month ago

Still as excellent as the

Still as excellent as the rest, really beautiful, I'm very glad I found your poems, I like people that inspire me.

jetz

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Wolf, I am humbled by

Hi Wolf, I am humbled by your response. I don't believe I have ever been told I was an inspiration...I will try not to let that go to my head. SMILE! Thank you again. Sue

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Jetz

perfect poetry, i loved every word and you really made it work the title is brilliant, and for a minute i was in hell! Beatiful..... i too am so glad i came to read...... shirley harrison

jetz

16 years 1 month ago

I must say Shirley, I was a

I must say Shirley, I was a tad surprised to see a response from you. That being said, I thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to pass them on. Sue

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

excellent write sue

'Can you see what isn’t there Do you feel what I can’t touch' the whole poem had me kind of on edge well done love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

jetz

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Judy, On edge...kind of what I imagine hell must be like, huh? I think writers write some of their best work, when they are in 'hell.' Thanks for stopping by and taking the time to respond. Greatly appreciated. Sue

hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Good write

I've been there. My home now is only Hell because it is located 706 miles from heaven. Take Care. huey

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