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UNCIVIL WAR

Lets now not talk of right or wrong
  who was weak and who was strong
  forget the leaders and their goals
  but just the ones who fought, poor souls

Some wore grey and some wore blue
  and often they each other knew
  the war that started off as "grand"
  too rapidly grew out of hand

The sides, it seemed , soon grew unable
  to put war's horses back in stable
  on both sides there were soldiers bold
  most of whom never grew old

They fought in cover and formation
  each thought for God and their own nation
  although afraid, they seldom fled
  both colors bleeding blood of red

The blue had numbers, grey had leaders
  the South had muskets, the North repeaters
  how could the grey have fought so long
  against a foe that was so strong ?

Had it remained a border war
  it may have ended long before
  hostilities became so strong
  none could admit to being wrong

The grey fought even stronger yet
  when armies in their homeland met
  they saw blue cousins as invaders
  themselves as home's frontline crusaders

In farmers' fields and woods they fell
  each side creating its own hell
  of rifle fire and cannon shot
  the reason for the fight forgot

At the end of each great battle
  the wagons' and the hearses' rattle
  told of a death toll ever growing
  as result of whirlwind sowing

When seemed the war would never end
  at Gettysburg, a change of wind
  in Pickett's charge the grey clad fell
  as if from scythe in open dell

This turning point where Lee was beat
  began the long bitter retreat
  then Sherman's rampage to the sea
  showed grey how ugly war could be

It seems the best of either side
  for their ideals fought and died
  each sacrifice was someone's brother
  and left behind a grieving mother

Each soul who chose to give his all
  in blue's triumph or in grey's fall
  when laid to rest beneath the sod
  were each beloved by kin and God


— scribbler, Jun 07, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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shirley harrison

16 years ago

Excellent!

Dear Stan i feel like i've been to war! fabulous write! i was a nurse in the secession! shirley harrison
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scribbler

16 years ago

war

thank you so much.Being a man of the south I felt compelled to write about the war's cost to all involved.Will probably undergo many rewrites.......scribbler
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magics02

16 years ago

Wow Scribe

Your poem was long but kept me in to the end, How brilliant a write like a poem story. You really have a way with your poems and I have not put my finger on it just yet but want you to know I really appreciated this one. Worthy of a five star and a nomination. When I give five stars it means to me that it was greath therefore a nom is also how I see it. Perfect form here! Great Job Love,mona
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scribbler

16 years ago

war

thank you for both! Also for taking time to read and comment on a conflict whose consequences are still being felt............scribbler
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scribbler

16 years ago

war

Never been in battle myself but expect it is more terrible than imaginable. Equally terrible for both sides.Thank you for time and comments.....scribbler
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scribbler

16 years ago

war

"worth of praise is inverse to its rarity"I don't think anybody said this but they should have HA!HA!I appreciate your taking time to read and comment on this work.Oh,yes I'm Stan or scribbler,father was Mr. P.S. don't write for stars, but for friends.....scribbler
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years ago

scribbler, the indi is right....

...the momentum of this piece is priceless. Congratulations ! You just made history, palpable ! Enjoyed the flow, and the effortless reading of your rhyme scheme. Excellent job. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
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scribbler

16 years ago

war

why thank you Doc !Perhaps should try being history teacher instead of writing poetry HA!HA! appreciate read and comment......scribbler
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

brother against brother

the worst kind of war... i watched the documentary 'the civil war' years ago - was astounded at the loss of life.... really didn't think there were that many people in america at the time. great scribble scribbler. love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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scribbler

16 years ago

war

Thanks for read and comment.My home town of Pendleton in South Carolina was nearly depopulated of fighting age men.Proud to live in a country in which both sides have mostly managed to put this terrible conflict behind us in such relatively short time........scribbler
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Wonderful Stan

Brilliant flow and rhyme, and a great tribute to the brave men who fight endless wars for peace. Superb poem too. Xena
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scribbler

16 years ago

war

thanks, Zena.In war each death is personal to the soldier involved.....scribbler
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ngaioBeck

16 years ago

Uncivil

Brilliant! Something that should be studied over and over. The war that changed the U.S. from a Republic and set it on the road to Empire! The price of which is always blood. Thus the country stands alone at the pinnacle,the Acropolis of the whole world,(or is it Necropolis),I always get those two mixed up.
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scribbler

16 years ago

war

Thank you for kind comment ngaio.Hope word you meant was Acropolis.Often wondered what a divided America would have meant in WW1 and WW2......scribbler
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ngaioBeck

16 years ago

Uncivil

Yes of course. Acropolis. That was just my lame attempt at irony as I am deeply anti-war.
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ngaioBeck

15 years 12 months ago

Ex-Military

Twenty-two years eighteen days!
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scribbler

16 years ago

war

Thank you Mand.I am glad image was received as intended.No matter how just war is an awful endeavor........scribbler