unsurrendered love

loving youwithmuted tones,uneven ripplingof fleshof bone my unsurrendered love,thrusts full ofbreath and giving,is furiousand earnest my unsurrendered loveconvergedwith yourdour almsand left me, conditioned i am sullen,keep cutting myselfon dark reasoning:i know,he won’t everlove me. i amtoo tiredto cry,to scrape togethermy littered self uneven ripplingof fleshof boneof lovehasleft me, marked.

— kowque, Jun 07, 2010

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Roscoe Lane

16 years ago

I think the title could be,

either unspeaking my love, or unspeaking our love. But apart from that i like the way it is put together. Good poem. Regards Roscoe..

kowque

16 years ago

helo

i changed the title-hope u like it :) thank you for stopping by.... koki

Kailashana

16 years ago

Your poem eloquently

Your poem eloquently unspeaks love. Each and every stanza speaks. ~ "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

kowque

16 years ago

hello,im glad u stopped by

hello,im glad u stopped by because i love your work as well ...we should plant a few olive trees together-im told the world might end soon :) thank you, koki

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Kowque

beautifully poignant piece its nice to see a new one from you ... brilliant work ... only one suggestion ... one word dour alms has (have would sound better in my opinion but its your poem your baby) beautiful poetry Kowque well done its a pleasure to read you again love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

kowque

16 years ago

hello,thank you for stopping

hello,thank you for stopping by and for your suggesstion :) its great to have a writer of your skill leave a mark on my work! kokz

ziggy

16 years ago

hi

hi good to read you again , love hurts, nice flow ,,,,,,,,,zigs