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hobo
hobo
Jun 06, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

I Had A Dream Last Night

I had a dream last night

And you were in it

I saw you
Sitting at a white baby grand
You were wearing a sun dress
With a flower in your hair
But you were naked

Blood was running from your eyes
And out of the tips of your fingers
Onto the keys

I was in a white tuxedo
With tails
But I was naked

I stood behind you
Kissed you on top of your head
And said I was sorry

We never spoke again

I sat down beside you
And started playing
Blood ran from my eyes
And out the tips of my fingers
Onto the keys

And we were both naked

— hobo, Jun 06, 2010

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judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

some dream randy

awesome write. hidden depths love judy http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Sounds like more of a nightmare Rand!!

YOu drew me in and I was liking it till it crept upon a horror show of blood coming out naked and fingers on my baby white grand piano,,, the piano with cobwebs and spooky sounds coming out of it. Wow what did you eat before you went to bed. LMAO It is just okay forme this one,,,It caught me off guard when you said you were wearing a sun dress but then you were naked?? maybe the dress disappeared??? wait and you were wearing the tuxedo but you were naked too, hmmm okay let me think on this one before I say anymore:)By the way what song were you playing on that baby grand? Let me know if you dare tell Love Mona xoxox
lou

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Oh Randy

beautiful and horrible at the same time. The poem has a surreal quality. love lou xx
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Randy

You caught Eddy Styx's attention with this poem (he is my male alter ego) He and I liked it very much. Very deep. I just had a naked dream myself, last night. Always, Cat
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Fred1932

16 years 1 month ago

Wow! speechless, you had me

Wow! speechless, you had me until the blood started running. That's when you took it to the other level. Deep, very deep. Almost deeper than love at first sight. Did you see a vampire movie or what?
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Randy

Like Cat I love dark poetry ... and this ones got my attention as well your bleeding eyes made me think of lifeblood given into music ... wonderful poem they just get better love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

I don’t think you realize

I don't think you realize how amazing this poem is. It works on so many levels. Truly remarkable this dream. ~A "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi
SH

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

wow !

this is a masterpiec! a spectacular write Hobo! shirley harrison
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 1 month ago

I wondered too...

about what you might have been eating. LOL I liked it though. It left me with graphic images, and wondering what it all might mean? Hmmmmmmm... ~ Gee
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Manko

16 years 1 month ago

passage

The poem has a scene, a taste, a smell, shadows and emotions so deep that it grips my throat. Loved it!
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

In case you were wondering

In case you were wondering I decided to tell you what this dream was all about. There was this lady who I worked with everyday for years. Her name is Aysa. we were very good friend. well one day I said something that hurt her pride. now I never meant to and I still after about 5 years still don't see what I said wrong but it is not important what I think it is important what she felt. I hurt her very deeply and she ask me how I could say such a think to her and she stopped talking to me all together. so the next day after I knew she was really hurt I went over to her in the brake room put my arm around her and kissed her on top of the head and told her I was sorry. Now we worked 10 feet from each other 8 hours a day for a couple of months before she finally talked to me again. sitting at the piano was because we worked so close to each other. The blood was all of the life that it took out of both of us. The kiss on the head and the never speaking again was just that. we were naked but had clothes on was us opening up our souls to each each, we were both naked. Now after a couple of months she finally started talking to me again and since then we have put it all behind us. I just thought you might like to know where that poem came from. *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*
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magics02

16 years ago

You are a kind and gentle loving soul

Hobo goes to show you what a soul can do and how forgiveness and love over rules all the hate and power someone thinks they have over you, This is a prime example of how people get over their resentments if only they could minus the five years:) Thank you for sharing the thoughts behind the write. Great job Hobo and nice to have you in chat last night. I think it was great everyone who contributed to a valued discussion. Really like this poem guy Love at ya friend Mona

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