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lou
lou

Oh my Lover

Oh lover when I think of you
I tremble inside
i'm like a giddy school girl

I can't hide

You ignite such a passion in me
you say hallo
i'm in bits

You say good bye , feels like there will
never be another day
 like the one you just gave me

Your in the rustle of  leaves
the blades of grass
the coolness of the breeze

Your my first , my last
my inbetween thought
your my every move and breath

 
Oh my  lover

— lou, Jun 05, 2010

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Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Moloko D. Mahuma

16 years ago

Beautiful

Such a beautiful, romantic and well written poem. "You ignite such a passion in me you say hallo I'm in bits" - beautiful lines, they remind us that love should be an unquenchable fire that burns inside. Regards, Moloko
lou

lou

16 years ago

Hi

Thank you Lou xx
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

Master of passion

This is so beautiful my friend, you are a master of writting with passion, beautiful write my friend
lou

lou

16 years ago

lol

Thank you love lou xx
loved

loved

16 years ago

HELLO OR HALLO!!!!

///You ignite such a passion in me you say hallo i’m in bits/// When i wrote a poem for some one as i do just for anyone that's exactly what that person wrote to me . but thereafter i was silenced i had to write more discreetly lovely poetry urs............
lou

lou

16 years ago

Lol

I never fully understand your comments lou xx
loved

loved

16 years ago

*”You ignite such a

*''You ignite such a passion in me you say hallo i’m in bits'' *THIS IS WHAT THAT PERSON SAID ONCE MY POETRY WAS READ SIMPLER NOW ISN'T IT?? please read in lower case thanks
lou

lou

16 years ago

Sorry........

it's just the way you phrase things , sometimes, lol lou xx
loved

loved

16 years ago

thanks

no sorry .... when something sprouts from one's heart it has to be the command of nature you call him God and I TIME nurture.
lou

lou

16 years ago

hi

thanks lou x
SH

shirley harrison

16 years ago

lovely Lou!

Are you In love? i see you have written with your heart! Its nice to be back and reading all my friends work! shirley harrison
lou

lou

16 years ago

Dear Shirley

Unrequited love is the strongest. Thankyou love lou xx
lou

lou

16 years ago

Dear Indie

Thank you that's beautiful. love louise xx