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Seren
Seren
Jun 04, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dangerous Goods

I crave one touch
and I ache
for the timbre
in your voice

as I search
into dark nights
for echo's that exist,
only in my dreams

I now find
that the rhythm
can no longer
lull my heart,
the softest touch
can never again
soothe my rage,

I am now
and for always
a jigsaw
short one piece

~~~~

it was night
when we met,
shadowed in secret
it is night now

and I remember
in the isolation
of my mind

when our skins held a story
that will now? never be known,
and the only separation
was a place between
the closing
of our eyes in sleep,
and the rejoining
of our eyes,
in the first shared
breath of morn

I saw you today
the draw is still,
and forever
irresistible

stay far away,
My sweet
Kryptonite

— Seren, Jun 04, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

L

Lonnie

16 years ago

Top-Notch Poetry, Jaycee!

A very plaintive piece that begs to be read more than once! Fluid, mesmerizing imagery, and all in all, just a great read! Bravo!
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Lonnie

thanks so much for the read and the comment its much appreciated, love to you both JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Jayne

This very descriptive piece had me gobbling it down line by line. The ending brought me a shiver, for I have a "Kryptonite" in my past, too. Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Cat

thanks for the read,if you got a shiver that was the intent huni ... that god stay away from me feeling lol love you hun hope your knee's feeling better and your getting back to normal love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Beautiful JayCee

Lovely imagination as always. What is meant by a "Kryptonite?" Is it a lost passionate love? Xena
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Rosina

In today's literature saying she's or he's my krptonite is to say they are my achilles heel .. its a lost love, I guess you could say .. thanks for the lovely comment hun hope your doing well love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Dale

im actually a bit disappoint with this one ... its missing something and a friend who I can always reply on to be honest called it pallid lol so I am working on it for the time being see if I cant improve the sucker ... hmmm I wondered about that question mark ... will think on it later after ive done some more work to it ... thanks for the comment will see if i cant improve it over the next few days JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
lou

lou

16 years ago

Dear Jayne

a beautiful and sexy poem love lou xxxx
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Lou

I'm a tad disappointed in this one will work on it some more see if I cant improve it .. its got the base of a good poem that I know it just needs some work ill see what i can do love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
M

magics02

16 years ago

Good one

Only got stumped on the question mark in the middle of the sentence threw me off. Maybe you intend it to be there and I love the last part of it but I can say for me I saw you today and just stay away my old kryptonite!! Got a good laugh and feeling from this one Grazie Mona xxox I never read any comments and I just seen Indi allready mentioned it about your question mark too. I always like to make my own comments so as not to reflect on so much the others till after I read them all. Anyhow good one here.
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Mona

Im going to work on this one some more and see what I cant do with it ... I debated on whether to leave that question mark ... but will see later in the edits if it goes or stays thanks for the comment JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
M

magics02

16 years ago

PS

forgot like your new avatar and is that really you mermaid Jayne:) Nice pictures I like them the one before too where do you get those from and I was just thinking is that one of your paintings? Darn good who's ever painted that pic!!
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Mona

God no thats not me, I have legs ~! lol ;) just joking ... I have the whole set of those pictures over the next few weeks I will slowly show them all except for a couple that I think are maybe a little too naked for the site and our younger members ... JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
P

poewriter58

16 years ago

Jay Cee

Excellent use of wording , images abound nice writing Chrys
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Chrys

Thanks for the comment hun I really appreciate your time and your visit ... love and big hugs to you both JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
loved

loved

16 years ago

I am always in awe of u.... as u MARVEL ME

krytonite from my chemical knowledge relates to green. but since u r the door to my dictionary ...i had to go searching from the Internet i quote for all ''Kryptonite is a fictional element from the Superman mythos, originating in the Superman radio show series. Despite the similar name, it has no connection to the real chemical element krypton. The material is usually shown as having been created from the remains of Superman's native planet of Krypton, and generally has detrimental effects on Superman and other Kryptonians. The name "kryptonite" covers a variety of forms of the substance, but usually refers to the most common "green" form. Kryptonite is one of the few things that can kill Superman. The word kryptonite is also used in modern speech as a synonym for Achilles' heel, the one weakness of an otherwise invulnerable hero
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Loved

thanks for the research and the comment loved ... your exactly right on the use of Kyrptonite ... modern day achilles Heel ;) marvel comics lol love and big hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
S

scribbler

16 years ago

goods

DAMN! everybody beat me to saying everything HA!HA!Still with my kryptonite........scribbler
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear scribbler

I have been late most of the week lol so i know what you mean thanks for the lovely comment hun, and if you're still with your kryptonite ? lucky man dont let her out of your sight ;) love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

i'm lost for words

'stay far away, My sweet Kryptonite' - great!! love and hugs judd xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Judd

Big hugs and thanks for the comment lovely hope your well ... love and hugs JayCee x x x and hugs over the flood waters lol ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

very beautiful my friend

This is very beautiful my friend,I really like the lines I saw you today the draw is still, and forever irresistible stay far away, My sweet Kryptonite how sweet is the kryptonite that is killing us. great write my friend and very easy read
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Randy

thanks so much for the comment hun I really appreciate the read needs a little work this one but I will get to it later this week thanks again love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
professor

professor

16 years ago

Hi Lil Sis

I can see why you arent quite happy with this one. It is summarising a set of very powerful feelings of longing, sensual excitement and terror but somehow it is all rather too tame. Its your poem and your emotions of course but I have tried to give you another version that is perhaps a little bolder (hope you like the extended wine analogy lol). Personally I was not too keen on the kryptonite image at the end since for me it rather trivialised the whole piece: One touch I crave, my senses scream the delicious, aching timbre of your voice. Searching frantic, ebony nights for echo's lure of seduction-woven dreams. But now I find expectant rhythm no longer lulls a yearning heart, nor soothes my body's rage with downy touch; for ever lacking completion by the puzzle's final piece. ~~~~ Shadows cast that night we met in secret, as they do now remembered with isolated mind, when vine-clung skins held the taste of story's fruit that will never now be pressed. Where the only separation was a place between sleep drunk eyes and their shared reopening with the first snatched nose of morn. I glimpsed you today the draw still uncorked, and forever irresistible. Stay ever far, My once-sipped ruby poison. Love and hugs BB
professor

professor

16 years ago

Hi Lil Sis

I can see why you arent quite happy with this one. It is summarising a set of very powerful feelings of longing, sensual excitement and terror but somehow it is all rather too tame. Its your poem and your emotions of course but I have tried to give you another version that is perhaps a little bolder (hope you like the extended wine analogy lol). Personally I was not too keen on the kryptonite image at the end since for me it rather trivialised the whole piece: One touch I crave, my senses scream the delicious, aching timbre of your voice. Searching frantic, ebony nights for echo's lure of seduction-woven dreams. But now I find expectant rhythm no longer lulls a yearning heart, nor soothes my body's rage with downy touch; for ever lacking completion by the puzzle's final piece. ~~~~ Shadows cast that night we met in secret, as they do now remembered with isolated mind, when vine-clung skins held the taste of story's fruit that will never now be pressed. Where the only separation was a place between sleep drunk eyes and their shared reopening with the first snatched nose of morn. I glimpsed you today the draw still uncorked, and forever irresistible. Stay ever far, My once-sipped ruby poison. Love and hugs BB
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest BB

Your a sight for sore eyes I have missed you around here and your a hard man to catch I been trying to catch up with you for days slow down (btw you just got mail lol) ... I am going to do a big edit on this one in a few days and some of your edit I am going to keep ... as you know I always listen :) id be stupid not to .. hope Lacy and the boys are well .. and send my love to angel girl ;) thanks so much for helping with this one ive been off lately the leg up was much needed (((((huggles)))) love to you both JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Ello again .... BB smile

LMAO I just laid in bed for the last three hours couldnt sleep, it must be getting close to dark there cause the the suns coming up here lol well it should be its that black outside I cant tell if the suns up or not black clouds everywhere the bad weather continues lol ... either I look harder or you start leaving bread crumbs for me to follow he he ;) lvoe you bb talk to you later I am going to try and get back to sleeeep ... hurry up and post a new poem and poke Lacy into posting as well for me lol love to you both big hugs Lil Sis x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")