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Sinthya
Sinthya
Jun 04, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Love or Lust

i look at you
i look and see pain,
happiness,
lust.
you smile in hopes that it will cover the pain.
i see right through it.
you lust because love is to hard for you.
happiness only comes around once in awhile.
i study all of you.
the way you walk,
talk, 
and breath. 
i want to feel your pain,
your happiness,
but not your lust.
lets take the next step.
i want your love.
— Sinthya, Jun 04, 2010

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xXsierraXx

xXsierraXx

16 years 1 month ago

i think its beautiful how it

i think its beautiful how it shows how some people are only in it for the sex while others want more and want to b committed to people
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 1 month ago

very sensitively expressed,

I'm really impressed with how much you have improved it with editing. This is very straight forwardly spoken in a way but has a poetic dignity and strength. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
Sinthya

Sinthya

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks

thank you so much i am happy to be coming along. its thanks to you.
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 1 month ago

I am only a mediator,

you choose to make the changes that work and keep it as your own poetry and vision, Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,
R

Rich-The-Poet

16 years ago

I truly enjoyed this

I truly enjoyed this piece,..,perfected with emotional bliss.,,.great read and write

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