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What Is Sin?

MY THANKS AND APPRECIATION TO ALL THOSE WHO HAVE CONTRIBUTED IN THE EDIT SO FAR

 This poem is my personal opinion and has no bearing on anyone.

Please read it   compassionately and independently

What is sin? ...............Part The First

 

The freedom of speech

In this poetic site

Permits me to voice
myself freely,

So I thought about

Sinning,

As today’s theme

 

 MAIN POEM


What then is Sin?

Not to kiss is

Not to look into one’s eyes

While speaking is

Not to fuck when the desire exists
of course is

Not to hold hands
when you should

Or must is sinful


When you look over your spouse’s shoulders
into another’s eyes is it not?

To circumcise is the biggest one,

Not to masturbate
and relieve one is master of all

Not to divorce, when there is need,

Is a big deal

To have sex
behind the spouse’s back
or when committed is an
absolutely absolute no, no 


And
last of all

I‘d like to say

Keep religion as personal

Never sin...


Let each one follow 

Budhism,

Christianity,

Hinduism 

Islamism

Sikhism

Scientiologism,
gayism,
lesbianism
and

Any other ism
that has yet to seed,

We must not err in these.

 

Last but not the least

Is the mother of all?

Not to be at peace with oneself

As one desires

And

Has a mind

For not to please one’s mind

Is the father of all?

Sin of sins!!!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

— loved, Jun 03, 2010

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Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

What IS reallly SIN?

There are only two 'L's' in really, incorrect spelling when we have spell checkers and dictionaries...is a sin. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
loved

loved

16 years ago

I have achieved

...my aim some folks r born that way one can't say why but that's just by the by There are more mistakes than mere spellings and capitals have a good look at everything but the content. Here I now add AMEN LOVED ONE
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

Well I didn't actually read...

...the poem, I just noticed the spelling mistake when I saw it on the stream including the incorrect grammar of the title. You have corrected the spelling error...so my job is done here. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

This is a workshop!

I don't believe you can stop me dropping in on your work, should I wish to. You wanted the raw truth, but not from me, despite the fact that my observation was greeted with you making the relevant correction!... ...and yet you've spent so much time and effort messaging me to read your work, and when I do, you ask me to avoid your page! However, I am not here to cause you any trouble, I am here to read and critique quality work, so I don't suppose we'll be crossing paths again, kindest regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Loved

It is against the rules, according to the AEC, to ask or tell someone to to leave your page and poetry alone, even though i see you have asked politely. Regards, Cat
loved

loved

16 years ago

My regrets to AEC

..But the person had sent two voraciously despicably rude messages to me, unbecoming of this wonderful NEOPOETS site... So I felt constrained. However I shall take note in future. Pardon my unintentional ignorance And please convey it to those concerned. If you still want I shall remove my insertion. I am known round the world ,for my politeness to a distinct default With respects and regards ma'am Loved
Jonathan Moore

Jonathan Moore

16 years ago

Block PMs

If you find PMs from certain people unwanted, block them. End of issue. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

loved

loved, I did send you two messages via pm's, both in response to your continual advertising campaign to my own pm box TELLING me to read your work...the fact the last message I sent you did ask you "go away", isn't as rude as I could have made it. You will find that you are unable to message me anymore. I have saved both messages and if you wish to report the "voraciously rude" messages, I will happily submit the messages to the AEC for their review and decision. kindest regards, Hooded Stranger ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
loved

loved

16 years ago

I am

.....mature enough than most .. my respects and regards i help human beings thats all kind of u i know u mean well u may also keep a copy of my good wishes thanks if i can be of any humble service pl do say Sir...........
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Strong stuff Loved

You did say that you weren't directing this at any particular person, so you have the right to say what you feel. Xena
loved

loved

16 years ago

i am

...an open book i love to help people at times when one makes a mistake i apologise this is not a sin apology can be made by ones who are above the level of the normal human plane
lou

lou

16 years ago

Sin

I agree with what you say , but the repeatition of 'is sin,' gets in the way of a good poem. Also there are a few tiny grammatical errors. i.e in the 2nd stanza line to should read , not to kiss is a sin, line 5 should not to fuck, is a sin, take the extra to out of line 6. Maybe you included an extra to in each of these lines on purpose, but it gets in the way. Otherwise the poem is good and the messege is sound. love lou xx
loved

loved

16 years ago

thanks

....I've changed the fabric quite a bit hope its no sin now..... let the sin repeat itself thats no sin maybe after u reread and readvise i shall relook and i'm no sinner that....
loved

loved

16 years ago

redrafted

do read, re read pl as it is perhaps more resilient thanks
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Hello Loved

You have overlooked the Pagans and the Wiccans, although I am sure it wasn't intentional. Keep working on it you have a good start and seem to know what you want to say. Always, Cat
loved

loved

16 years ago

could you please

...help me in incorporating the desired aspects thanks as i am not too conversant with the kind you have in mind
arja

arja

16 years ago

:) this is great read (the

:) this is great read (the poem), I did try to skip the comments above... but I'm sorry I stumbled..anyway, I came for your poem.. ..overall, clever write.. ;)
loved

loved

16 years ago

thanks

...glad u stumbled please do read www.triond.com lovelyhoney CANCER SOCIETY FUND