judyanne

Jun 03, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Two of My Poor Father's Many Miscalculations

It was about mid-day he made the first mistake

when by back gate of the top paddock he traversed

to head for the pub, a few ales to partake,

knowing of no protection in this universe

from mum’s wrath if she found out.

Now it happened she needed some vegetables.

Guess what she passed on the way to the shopping-mart?

My dad’s second error unmistakable

in the ignition of his ute in the hotel car-park.

A promise denies me the chance to elaborate.

Just let it suffice for me to say

that day my progenitor walked a mile of country

because someone took the keys from his parked utility.

— judyanne, Jun 03, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

Critiques

xena465

16 years ago

Very funny Judy

It's got me guessing this one? Xena

judyanne

16 years ago

sure rosina

xxx thanks love judy http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

loved

16 years ago

a lesson

..well learnt if not taught

judyanne

16 years ago

hi loved

it was back in the good old days days when everybody left their keys in the ignition. thanks for visiting love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

loved

16 years ago

yeah

...but of course times have since changed

scribbler

16 years ago

miscalculations

Needed a good laugh, thanks.Thought everybody knew you can't get anything past a spouse HA!HA!.....scribbler

judyanne

16 years ago

thanks scribbler

i don't know about others - but i know my dad never got anything past my mum love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

weirdelf

16 years ago

oh my, I know how he felt.

i alway seemed to win the meat tray from the raffle of the day when I strayed the pubs way. I may I humbly suggest that the ending could be strengthened by matching the meter of the last two lines? I suspect you wrote it as it is on purpose to emphasise the length of the walk but it doesn't quite work for me. Another way around it might be to switch the lines Just suffice to say that day keys missing from his parked utility. my progenitor walked a mile of hot open country Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]

judyanne

16 years ago

thanks jess

thanks for the edit i have altered lines 10 and 11 hopefully they read more smoothly appreciated love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

weirdelf

16 years ago

yes! much better to me

Always a dilemma in a workshop, to throw out the baby with the bath water, but you kept the integrity and the punchline. Cool. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Judd

Awww the poor old buggar only wanted an Ale lol Mum always spoils the fun ha ~! loved it hun ... good work you two :) love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

judyanne

16 years ago

thanks jc

poor dad never got away with anything i have so many stories of his defeats they'd fill a volume love and hugs judd xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

16 years ago

Judd my Dad was the quiet

Judd my Dad was the quiet one who would only be henpecked so far and then he would pull mum down a couple of pegs, she had a strong personality I have some of it lol but I am not a nag my partner does as he pleases lol he knows the rules you stray away ?? you better stay away ;) my motto :) lmao so hes a good boy love and big hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

judyanne

16 years ago

my dad was pretty much the same i think

he would take so much for the sake of peace, then with the proverbial last straw he would blow - trouble was that what he eventually blew his top over was usually something simple - just the final spark that set off the bonfire and usually had nothing to do with the main issues. loved him dearly - a very patient gentleman my dad love judd xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

judyanne

16 years ago

been meaning to say

that's a very sexy pose you're holding there in your avitar jc (smile) xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html