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Jun 03, 2010
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Red
He was the good son,
and brother, as well
with a hunger for living
he couldn't quite quell;
living for family
'til he sent them, away...
my friend, Red....can't come out to play.
~
Tortured, in life
but, still wore a smile
that would put you in, awe
but, that was Red's style,
a teacher, a mentor,
a student of the day;
Red's hope began slipping, away.
~
All I can remember
is, he'd never condone,
even his behaviour
for leaving his family, alone;
he would've straightened things out
had he just one more day,
and that's something, my friend "Red", would say.
— docmaverick, Jun 03, 2010
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scribbler
16 years 1 month ago
red
docmaverick
16 years 1 month ago
Thanks, Scribbler....
Moloko D. Mahuma
16 years 1 month ago
It is so beautiful
docmaverick
16 years 1 month ago
Thank-you, Moloko....
Antoinette Mar…
16 years 1 month ago
Red...
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
Doc
docmaverick
16 years 1 month ago
I greatly appreciate your support, Mona....
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
Doc
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
Thanks Doc
weirdelf
16 years 1 month ago
you just had to slip in to the second person
docmaverick
16 years 1 month ago
Hey elf....
weirdelf
16 years 1 month ago
you beauty! Now a fine poem indeed.
docmaverick
16 years 1 month ago
Elf....
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