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She Was

 

  A talented young girl
was full with passion,
she grew up 
in the middle of no where  
could you imagine?
in a moment  
every thing turned upside down
the earth, the moon , and the stars
all these moving around her
she felt that she is the only human on earth    
in that night she changed
from the innocent  child
into an adult
Its only one night
The talent seized
The dreams stolen
The passion for future flayed
A dying lady asking for help
From a child who had n't
experienced any thingWho is she?
Oh, her mom
Where is the father
In night duty
Where is the rest of the family?
Sleeping, sleeping, sleeping in un-limited wealthWhere is she from all that?
Greedy people do not share.in one night she got older,
older,
no painting,
no smile
Only responsibilities 
— mona, Jun 02, 2010

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Country/Region: LBY

Favorite Poets: Some Arab poets, my love once, .....Dear friends too

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Grassfield

16 years ago

wow

a haunting write...full of intangible beauty...oh, the loss...never counted but always seen...loved it great write
chumfin

chumfin

16 years ago

i like your sense of

i like your sense of judgment on your poem, really you need to add the missing link to this poem, i bet you its indeed a great work you must perfect. be encouraged. i like the use of words, great indeed. respect. chumfin
loved

loved

16 years ago

its like

...the end or beginning of a tsunami presently the MEXICO GULF is burning
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Mona

Lovely poem I think it could use a tiny edit but thats totally up to you as the poet happy to help if you like :) love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
mona

mona

16 years ago

Dear Seren

I'm glad that you like it,and I will be so happy if I will get your help and support. MONA
RobeccaJane Lee-Murchison

RobeccaJane Le…

15 years 12 months ago

DEEP

this reminds me of myself. ay dios miyo(oh my god), it is like you are writing of my childhood, of my life, it speaks to my heart as well as the stuff that i write does, and that is hard for people to do, i think that you are the only artist that has done that, with word. i give you my praise. AMAZING.
mona

mona

15 years 12 months ago

Dear Jane

sorry to know that , and I'm glade that you like it. You know this is a story of many girls have experienced such situation.....I know for sure (thanks-شكراً) MONA
Benjamin1987

Benjamin1987

15 years 10 months ago

Hello Mona

Hello Mona. It is nice to meet you. This poem really caught my eye. When I read it I could only think of a young girl who was forced to grow up too fast and not really being able to have a childhood. It also sounds as if the narrator wanted to be something she wanted to be, but was held back by something. Very impressive piece, I hope to see more like this. Benjamin