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Jun 02, 2010
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She Was
A talented young girl
was full with passion,
she grew up
in the middle of no where
could you imagine?
in a moment
every thing turned upside down
the earth, the moon , and the stars
all these moving around her
she felt that she is the only human on earth
in that night she changed
from the innocent child
into an adult
Its only one night
The talent seized
The dreams stolen
The passion for future flayed
A dying lady asking for help
From a child who had n't
experienced any thingWho is she?
Oh, her mom
Where is the father
In night duty
Where is the rest of the family?
Sleeping, sleeping, sleeping in un-limited wealthWhere is she from all that?
Greedy people do not share.in one night she got older,
older,
no painting,
no smile
Only responsibilities
— mona, Jun 02, 2010
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Critiques
Grassfield
16 years 1 month ago
wow
mona
16 years 1 month ago
I'm glad that you like it but,,,
chumfin
16 years 1 month ago
i like your sense of
loved
16 years 1 month ago
its like
mona
16 years 1 month ago
My Dear,,Lovely comment
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Mona
mona
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Seren
weirdelf
16 years 1 month ago
I love this, it is a lot clearer and more expressive now
mona
16 years 1 month ago
My dear friend Jess,,,
RobeccaJane Le…
16 years 1 month ago
DEEP
mona
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Jane
Benjamin1987
16 years ago
Hello Mona
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