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Kneel Before My Love:

My heart is a fish heading down stream
whenever our eyes meet
Her silver hands bejewelled with rubies of light
reach to cup it
a more fitting birth than the waiting coffin of my breast within

In the bazaar there walks a woman who parades
her many beauties
and lifts the hearts of lovers
She makes of all men secret thieves
who steal with their eyes the object of their obsession
Her perfumes all the spice winds of Eden
She will gladen the heart and then break it with glee
All her lovers attributes are transient
she is fleeting as the trembling heart of a tiny bird
among hungry eagles
She visits for one brief moment and is gone...

O proud rulers of men
kneel before my love
kneel until your bones crack
gaze until your eyes are blind with tears
she will teach you humility
she will make of you thankful penitents...
— Dalton, Jun 01, 2010

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Country/Region: The Celestial River

Favorite Poets: Shane MacGowan, Dylan Thomas, Qays ibn Al-Mulawwah, Wallada bint al-Mustakfi, Rumi, Khalil Gibran, Yona Wallach, Arthur Rimbaud, Paul Eluard, Brendan Behan, James Clarence Mangan, William Blake, Tom Waits, Charles Bukowski, Forough Farrokhzad, Thomas Chatterton

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

A low bow, Dalton. With

A low bow, Dalton. With this poem you have touched the Beloved. There is not a word I would change or alter except bejeweled. ;-) ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
lou

lou

16 years ago

Dear John

Like Kaliashana I think the poem is good and doesn't need the word bejewled. I also think it would read better if you took these words out of the second stanza,in the second line (many), in the fourth line (all) and in line 8 (all). Otherwise I think it's perfect. love lou xx
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Lol. I was referring to the

Lol. I was referring to the spelling: John omitted an e from bejew(e)lled. ~ "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
A

anonymous1

16 years ago

LOL for sure!

So funny! I should read more carefully. ~lml
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear John

its a really lovely poem I cant see anything to crit I think its all been said before me love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
BW

Bluesky Woman

16 years ago

here is my favorite part:she

here is my favorite part: she is fleeting as the trembling heart of a tiny bird among hungry eagles thanks for this fascinating poem, Dalton. Leigh "The true miracle is not walking on water or walking in air, but simply walking on this earth." Thich Nhat Hanh
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 12 months ago

Dalton!

wonderful poetry well done ! shirley harrison