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I Got A Feeling

The sensation of your skin on my skin,
The scent of your body on my body,
The taste of your lips on my lips,
The sound of your breath mingling with my breath,
The view of us coming together thrust after pleasurable thrust,
The wondrous joy of lying side by side,
Night after night after night,

Heavy breathing and face numbing responsiveness,
Pouring sweat,
Unconscious phenomenon,
all around perplexity,
Complete and total apprehension acclimatize,
Exasperation and resentment accumulate,
this transpires incessantly,

I conjure you up on a regular occurrence,
I acknowledge that you are a replica,
that is neither here nor there,
The core requests what the heart desires,

There is no culmination for this ritual,
I recognize,
 I deal with, and believe in this problem,
when you come around it will go away,
Until then i satisfyingly suffer loneliness,
Waiting for you,
Dreaming of you.
— RobeccaJane Lee-Murchison, Jun 01, 2010

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Region, Country: New York, USA

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Mark

Mark

15 years 12 months ago

Dear Rebecca

This is quite a yearning and it must surely be love , yes? You might consider changing suffering to suffer. If you use repetition a lot you might run into problems as it is considered redundant by most. It's a good poem about the yearning. I hope to be back here.. Nice to read you, Mark PS if you reply to this comment I will not be able to change the stars rating in the future, you can however make a new comment :) Resilient Flexibility RUN; when there seems to be no answer common sense will not speak, so run - -go running..
RobeccaJane Lee-Murchison

RobeccaJane Le…

15 years 11 months ago

Appretiation

y yes mark it sure is love, if not something pretty damn close. guy has me totally L-O-V-E crushed out on him! i appretiate the critisism, and will tak eit all into account! THANKS! MUAH CHEEKY JSS "please someone help me, its not healthy for me to feel this, Y-O-U, are making this hard, you got me tossing and turnin, late in the night!!!!!;)" Rhianna. PS you know who you are, and trust me this is a good thing;)