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I SENSE, I FEEL

I SENSE, I FEEL






I feel the breeze rise in my sleeves, 

the green of grass as it grows,

the firmness cold of stones, their grey,

the tides surge up the coasts and sigh, 

the wheeling shapes the birds make in the sky,

the temperature of summer, winter, fall.

the tumble of a beetle in its path,

the song of crickets in the memory's heart.

 

I feel the ghost of ancestors, on looking at their art,

the grandeur of the mountains make me tall and small, 

the softness of the coltsfoot's leaf, its wool,

the sharpness of the roses tags, and bleed, 

the sky's blue canopy, protection and abuse, 

the rivers course through jungles, woods,

the roughened gnarled old bark of trees.

 

I feel the shadow moving slowly round the clock, 

the dark night's shawl of void, no sight, 

the magnetic fields, their pull of gravity too, 

the gurgle of the streams as inner music, mine, 

the companionship of those I love, all the time,

the flow of words come as I write,

alive, awake, alert, in awe of all that moves, 

thankful to have lived, to see and feel,

I feel, I feel, I feel, I feel I feel. 

 



 
— Nordic cloud, May 31, 2010

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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lou

lou

16 years ago

Beautiful

Beautiful , but 'I feel, ' is repeated too much. I think the poem would be even better if you just said I feel at the start. love lou xx
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Ann

I like what this write represents Ann...very nice. Maybe you could end the last line something like this... I feel, I sense, I feel, I sense and feel, all that is real. Rosina xena465
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years ago

Thank you all.

Ann of Norway I followed some of the advice too, it looked just so nice when I wrote it out with the repetition down the page, but i agree with this change, your new picture is stunning too Rosina, is it Xena herself? I like your hair better though. Anna, ah Anna! The clouds are shining extra white just now in he view!
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Yes Ann

It's the real Xena. Thanks for nice compliment. When I was younger I hated the colour of my hair, `Strawberry Blonde`. I use to get called `Ginger Nut`, and I wished that my hair was black. I dyed it black when I was 15 years old and I looked like a witch, with my skin colour being so fair, it looked awful. Xena
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years ago

Ann of NorwayI was mousy

Ann of Norway I was mousy brown as we say, a little lighter than my sister, and if I should have chosen when I was young I wanted the hair of Anne of Green Gables, Auburn that lovely Autumn deep red, but then I didn't so that was that. I have stayed as I am given, it changes now from year to year getting whiter, although not as white as my fathers was at 60, so I don't know what it will do next!!!I I might, sh!! dye the ends red one time for fun. It always amused me when we had Carnival celebrations that one of the fathers came with their dressed up offspring, with BLUE hair to join in the fun he dyed it!!! I admired his verve. We are never satisfied are we? Love to you dear lovely Rosina from Ann.
Geezer

Geezer

16 years ago

I am in agreement...

With lou, I think that maybe you could lose the I feel part, and maybe just add it at the start of each verse. That way, you have the repetition, but not to distraction. Love to my Queen, ~ Sir Gee
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Oh, to feel and know that

Oh, to feel and know that feeling makes us human! Kings and queens of our own domain! ~A p.s. I concur with placing the *I feel* at the beginning of each stanza. However, the end line is perfect! "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

This is good

It's nice to see some real help with a poem. Rosina xena465
BW

Bluesky Woman

16 years ago

lovely imagery

Ann, your poem speaks so well of your experience at this beautiful place of nature. It comes straight from your heart, in a very thoughtful way. I like it a lot. esp these lines: the dark night’s shawl of void, no sight, the magnetic fields, their pull of gravity too, the gurgle of the streams as inner music, mine, the companionship of those I love, all the time, Leigh Bluesky Woman
BW

Bluesky Woman

16 years ago

lovely imagery

Ann, your poem speaks so well of your experience at this beautiful place of nature. It comes straight from your heart, in a very thoughtful way. I like it a lot. esp these lines: the dark night’s shawl of void, no sight, the magnetic fields, their pull of gravity too, the gurgle of the streams as inner music, mine, the companionship of those I love, all the time, Leigh Bluesky Woman
BW

Bluesky Woman

16 years ago

your revision

Ann, I like your revsion ..... I love this line: the song of crickets in the memory’s heart. I wonder if at the very end, the last line would work to simply say, Oh! I feel..... because the rest of the poem speaks so eloquently of all you feel..... by the way, do you live in Norway now? I will soon be moving to Denmark, we'll be neighbors.... blessings on your June feeling, Leigh "The true miracle is not walking on water or walking in air, but simply walking on this earth." Thich Nhat Hanh
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

beautiful

'the grandeur of the mountains make me tall and small the roughened gnarled old bark of trees... the shadow moving slowly round the clock, the dark night’s shawl of void,.. the magnetic fields, their pull of gravity too, the gurgle of the streams as inner music....' somehow made me feel as i did when i was young - a child. love it annanya love and hugs judyanne xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html