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raj

Moon-struck

One glimpse was enough
to mesmerize me
before she slipped
into silken wisps

Her turn on smile
was holding my gaze
she'd caught me feasting
on her hide

As she tip toed her way
on the starlit ramp
she held my breath
with her charm

The show went on
late into the night
my eyes couldn't latch 
on  her hind

She had me hooked
to her lithsome moves
and that "come on" look
in her eyes

The night wore on
way into dawn, till
I eased my pallete
by her canvass

I laced her lips
a translucent pink
before laying her
by my side....
 

— raj, May 30, 2010

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magics02

16 years ago

Hello Ocean

Nice one here and as I checked your profile I did not see nothing about you or a picture. Hope to find out more about you as I enjoy your poem. How about a pic soon ocean? Have a Happy Memorial Weekend Mona
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raj

16 years ago

Hello Mona..

thank you for the time to read ... my picture?..i just painted a picture of the moon...try mine...lol...pardon the humor... wishing you smiles.. raj (sublime_ocean)
mona

mona

16 years ago

I,m always.... "smile" even in the most hard days......

When I drown my eyes in your eyes, I glimpse the deepest dawning and see the ancient times; I see what I do not comprehend and feel the universe flowing between your eyes and mine. This is an Arabic poem translated into English http://www.adab.com/en/modules.php?name=Sh3er&doWhat=shqas&qid=159 http://www.neopoet.com/blog/40675-translated-arabic-poems ( vote for you)
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raj

16 years ago

Mona

thank you for sharing the lines of the original arabic poem translated in english?..did you translate it yourself? whatever ...i loved the poem...it touched my heart and set it in ripples.... thank you once again for sharing this beautifull piece.. warmly..raj (sublime_ocean)...
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

This is beautiful

This sounds like a perfect discription of moon struck. very nice read
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raj

16 years ago

thank you for your succinct

thank you for your succinct comment...it was just an attempt to paint the Moon in different strokes... raj(sublime_ocean)...
xXsierraXx

xXsierraXx

16 years ago

confused

i didn't really get it confused me until i read others peoples comments but i like the poem i guess i just didn't understand what it was about
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raj

16 years ago

thank you

thank you for your time to read through...the meaning is all there in the title i chose for this poem "Moon Struck"...obviously its about the charm the moon casts upon me and i was flirting with it in the poem... warmly..raj (sublime_ocean)..
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Raj

Very sexy write this one. Xena
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raj

16 years ago

nice comment…thank

nice comment...thank you...you have put up a very catchy pic of yours... raj (sublim_ocean)..
ED

Eugene Docena

16 years ago

Very Nice!

Goodness! I almost fell for her. Does she have a sister? ;P
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raj

15 years 12 months ago

Loved the humor

your exclamation says it all...i loved the humor too :) thank you.. raj(sublime_ocean)..