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mona
mona
May 30, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Losing a Friend

 In a dark night he came to my dreamsStolen, seized, and kept me into his dreamsWhen Sleep callsOur souls flyIn the middle of the nightBecame the joyTwo soul mates met in life’s heavenGreeted each other without speechThe sky whispered to the earth,There are a soul mates in betweenJoyShowed me the universe through his eyesIt’s a life of wondersA wakened bodies disturbed their dreamwe have to separate and go backI lost a lot, and there is no useTo meet again,Just stay, and save painJust stay, and save your pain again.
— mona, May 30, 2010

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Country/Region: LBY

Favorite Poets: Some Arab poets, my love once, .....Dear friends too

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raj

16 years 1 month ago

Mona

the pain and anguish in your poem is so alive..very expressive.. sorry to know you lost a good friend...may his soul rest in eternal peace.. raj (sublime_ocean)
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Lonnie

16 years 1 month ago

A very touching write!

excellent piece expressing the sorrow for a lost soul! Well-written and very readable!
mona

mona

16 years 1 month ago

thank you Mr.Lonnie

I have used (Mr),because in my culture we should n't call older people with their names only(its a kind of respect)I do n't know your culture,,,,,, About the poem :I was confused while I'm writing this peace.I was writing about some thing and I found myself wrote some thing else,maybe my native language influence?! then again I mada correction to it and I got another one : Losing a friend 1.In a dark night he came to me stolen me and seized me when Sleep calls ,souls fly In the middle of the night Became the joy Two soul mates met in life’s heaven Greeted each other without speech The sky whispered to the earth , There are soul mates in between Joy Showed me the universe through his eyes It’s a life wonder A wakens bodies disturbed them They have to separate and go back….. I lost a lot ,and there is no use To meet again Just stay,and save Your pain again. ……………… 2. In a dark night he came to my dreams Stolen, seized, and kept me into his dreams When Sleep calls, Our souls fly In the middle of the night Became the joy Two soul mates met in life’s heaven Greeted each other without speech The sky whispered to the earth, There is a soul mate in between Joy Showed me the universe through his eyes It’s a life wonder A wakens bodies disturbed their dream They have to separate and go back I lost a lot, and there is no use To meet again Just stay, and save pain Just stay, and save your pain again.
hobo

hobo

16 years 1 month ago

a beautiful write

this is a beautiful write espically coming from your imagination, it seems to be coming from your heart, from experence. very nice
mona

mona

16 years 1 month ago

thanks HOBO

My feeling and my imagination can't be divided ,when I'm imagine some thing ,,I feel it too as if it is truth.,,but this one is compound of old memories(V.O memo.) ,imagination, feelings,refreshed by magic or magic of someone. MONA
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

well done Mona..

even in your imagination your expressions are so very sincere and heartfelt which is worthy of appreciation...i liked the little changes you have made...please let your your imaginations let go... raj (sublime_ocean)...
chumfin

chumfin

16 years 1 month ago

arabian queen

my dear this situation has brought out a very beautyful part of you out in poetry. you expression in this poem is awesome, i love it . the feelings it conjures is something to respect. great poem my dear friend. chumfin
mona

mona

16 years 1 month ago

Its just old memories

only I have remembered hard times ,and this poem for : (people who supported me in these hard days) thanks chumfin
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mantiscepter

16 years 1 month ago

soul mates

very nicely written, a good story line. a deep subject. and a grand fantasy. well done Mona . have a good Day. John Mantiscepter
mona

mona

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you

though it is not my Native language but I'm trying my best. MONA
mona

mona

16 years 1 month ago

That is nice of you John

Its not powerful command of the english language, but its powerful command of MONA's feelings ; the language I will try to improve it by time. MONA
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OrWhoSheThought....

16 years 1 month ago

wow

I really like it. 8D Very very nice.
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 1 month ago

oh superb!

You express so freely, without restraint, the last 3 lines rivet it. I could comment on some other things but I love to hear your voice as it is. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
mona

mona

16 years 1 month ago

Oh my dear ,my guide, advicer,and dear friend,, like it

do you remember ,I sent this poem with the old version (the original one)and you missunderstood the meaning and you became angry,even you did not reply any comment about it ,but I decieded to publish it.I'm sooooooooooooooooooooooo much happy that you like it.And I would like you to comment about the other things which I think it will help me to improve my poems. Your dear friend MONA

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