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the streaming presence of Seth

there is a soliloquy.....

imagine if you will,
an omniscient god
beneath the falling leaves
dreaming of awakening,
splendid in the elongated light,
a  druid dancer
taking root and wing,
in the stream the loneliest life:
a shamanic journey
inside the museum of time,
an open invitation

we walk through the
gates of Paradise empty-handed
speak with sensuous
fingertips,
shhhhh!
what do you hear echoing in
the chamber of your heart?

the cosmos bears witness
we will never pass this way again.

















— Kailashana, May 29, 2010

Critiques

lou

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Spiritual

Very spiritual, I like the lines 'we walk through the gates of paradise empty handed, speak with sensuous fingertips.' Nice job. love louxx
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

Going nowhere up, nowhere down, going nowhere at all.

Ann of Norway "dreaming of awakening, splendid in the elongated light, a druid dancer taking root and wing," Longer and longer until root and wing become one, going nowhere up, nowhere down, going nowhere at all. A fascinating poem Anna from Ann X

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