May 28, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Qiblah Cosmonauts

The Moon is visible to nobody, Rainy nature exaggerates its primary control, Life and the human race as we know it are no longer powerful, People pray for volunteers to end the loneliness that they feel, Experiencing the creation of drinking has made all of this drab a little more bearable.

— RobeccaJane Lee-Murchison, May 28, 2010

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Region, Country: New York, USA

Critiques

anonymous1

16 years ago

How did you come up with this?

Hi Robecca, How did you come up with this? What was your thought process? It seems to me like each line is a separate thought so the cohesiveness of the piece is absent. May I suggest taking the first line and developing that idea further? Or perhaps expand on the title... Respectfully, Lisa

RobeccaJane Le…

16 years ago

it was an english assignment

it was an english assignment and i thought that it was odd and that nobody would have one like it, so i posted it. i dont just think outside of the box, i tear it up. lol thank you for the advise though. Becca

RobeccaJane Le…

15 years 11 months ago

DELETE??????

i believe that i sould delete this, as to the fact that nobody understands it, but to me it makes since, i guess you have to think like me to get it, get inside this crazed head of mine and try to understand just how the thoughts fit together. i am still thinking about it, and as it takes me forever to make a decison, it will not be going anywhere for at least a week, so take your time, if i get comments, or just someone telling me that they get it, then it will stay if i still cant decided for myself, if not then it is gone. i dont know. the brain is a strange place and for me, most of it is unchartered territory. MUAH CHEEKY JSS "please someone help me, its not healthy for me to feel this, Y-O-U, are making this hard, you got me tossing and turnin, late in the night!!!!!;)" Rhianna. PS you know who you are, and trust me this is a good thing;)