the tide is lipstick red and the sky is a grey flatland

The title is surreal for the first half and then falls flat for me. I suggest the following based just on re-arranging one word: "the tide is lipstick red and the sky is a flatland grey" But I do like the use of the archaic form "grey." I like the feel of this much better than the current "gray." With the title change, I would extend the word re-arrangement into the poem itself for a smoother scan and to impart more finality to the end of the thought. Sentences ending in a single syllable can be more powerful and aid in conveying an image or feeling. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

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because i don't think i really understand what you are saying i love 'we are strangers in a strange alchemy, code talkers' where does the 'limping with arrows in our heels.' fit? as usual, your word use is beautifully descriptive. love judd xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

beautiful poetry .. history will remember you and your words they will seep through the ages they wont be judged but pondered and wondered over... good morning I couldnt sleep smiles love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Ann of Norway Surreal this one Anna:- I feel as if I were walking on glass shards here Anna, in trepidation, where the realities of art have become mixed in time and we are finding ourselves lost in a maze of coloured paint flying about like a flock of angry sea gulls screaming blue murder and pooping poisonous venom over us, quiver and quake! I didn't see the film. Love to you dear Anna from Ann.

Ann of Norway "we are strangers in a strange alchemy, code talkers"...... .....how true when one really looks, or is aware of what people say to each other every day, there are so many banal and uninteresting conversations, so many clichés and acts of self interest that one wonders truly what life is there for. There are so many things that could be simplified,explained and understood between people, they hide their true selves in the guises of actors, the one's that they think suit them, then expect one to believe their words. Just yesterday we met two young boys, 19-20, who were themselves; what a relief to find there are some people who are totally themselves and not out to impress, or over-rule others with clever arguments, or to flirt when they don't mean any of it; ah, the natural person, that is what is so wonderful to meet, someone without a heavy load of indignation about everything, fear of unseen imaginative ideas, all sorts, just being themselves and expressing how they really feel. All those people acting out a grey flatland of mediocrity rather than developing their own potential, all have potential if they care to find it and use it. Love to my dear sister Anna, from Anniuska. lipTstick!